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At the Silly Age of 23

The wind has carried her

fresh faced,
pure and misunderstood

I know her only from the inside

seeking adventure
searching for love
and finding truth

with six strings and solitude

 

She says she's shy -


said it millions of times
(probably the only thing she says
that I don't believe in)

she is the spotlight and
I am behind curtains

of unwashed windows

She travels by constellations

and

 

I am still as stone

under the whoosh of a busy fan
and silent wonders

 

 

 

 

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Author notes

Title and poem inspired by "This Cigar" --Jewel Kilcher

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  • stevencorklad
    November 26
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    That is on its way 2 deeply amazing, love your comparison of feelings to "under the whoosh of a busy fan" Im guessing you mean the world, life & people?


  • lilAj
    September 30

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    goodness...

    She travels by constellations
    and the sound of gravel

    under her shoes


    really like it


  • Ken-Maverick
    August 18
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    Awesome


  • styrofoam
    August 17

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    'with six strings and solitude'

    brilliant

    this is your official goodbye to writer's block


  • sweet arrival gold member
    August 17
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    omg... i know her too. i was reading this thinking... ummm.. how does catie know her too? what you did in this was made me apart of your poem without me realizing it until the end, when i had to let go of the words, letter by letter. yep... i read it 5 times. am i weird? dont answer, that was rhetorical.
    wonderfully done.

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