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Dream Lover

I'm not sure how it is that you intend to come
or where exactly from.
I just know that wherever or however I'll be waiting
eagerly and deeply anticipating.
For you to come into my dreams
and take me far beyond the extremes.
It seems that will be the only way
for an entire night in each other's arms we can stay.
Tonight my beautiful dream lover
there are so many things for us to discover.
A pleasant evening visit
that could get quite explicit.
Making passionate love all night long
creating the sweet beautiful chords to our own song.
My sleep is your entrance key
so now it's time for you to come find me.
You know the place
and I'll leave the lights off just in case.

Author notes

"Fool," said my muse to me. "Look in thy heart, and write"
Sir Sidney
Written August, 2002

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  • daviscth silver member
    March 3, 2008

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    What a beautiful imagery filled piece of work. This is so great!!! Thanks so much for posting for my contest.


  • grannyeri gold member
    January 12, 2006
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    So endearing - so wanting...lovely penned poem - one day it'll be for real.

  • untimely-love
    August 11, 2005
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    *sits with jaw open* this is great... i dun have much to say but yeh it was good... did i mention that it was good? lol ne who great write .....




    luv always frog


  • Sugarclock
    August 11, 2005
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    very sweet and delicate great piece....

  • Molly Densmore silver member
    August 10, 2005
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    So lovely and romantic. I loved this it expressed love all through out. Wonderfully written and wonderful flow. Isn't love grand? aaahh yes!! Great job on this and thank you for sharing it.


  • a b s i n t h e
    August 10, 2005
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    I liked the imagery that you used. Very prettily done.


  • grannyeri gold member
    August 10, 2005
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    Ahhhhhh....What a wonderful reason to go to sleep - the anticipation of a dream lover.,. Great effort.


  • Trellis
    August 10, 2005
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    A lovely dream, a lovely poem!


  • Sapphire gold member
    April 15, 2005
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    Well, seems like I'm not the only romantic, talented poet here on AP
    This poem was extremely well written and the comment in your author note was spot on. Whenever your muse sees fit to leave, then just look into your heart and you will always find something there.
    The rhyme was very good in this piece and added a little extra something to the poem. I enjoyed reading this very much

    Sapphire

  • Kinky Lil Devil
    March 31, 2005
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    i love it spectacular spectacular !!!!!


  • suseann
    March 31, 2005
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    Really Hot Write

    Panting passion write.YOU'VE BEEN WATCHING MY DREAMS.I believe you have a talent for expressing deep passionate vocabulary.~~~Suseann


  • Kalima
    March 31, 2005
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    This was so beautiful and sweet. I love this poem. I believe I will be adding this to my book marks list. And the background is really pretty too. Keep pen in hand! ~Stacey~

  • Michael L
    March 31, 2005
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    :o

    Wow

    I think that can qualify as a critical review from me.


  • GOT-XO
    March 31, 2005
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    very interesting~ I like it!!!!!
    check out my poetry!

  • Midnight Raindrops
    March 31, 2005
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    this is a sweet poem i like how it ends 2 thumbs up!!!!


  • Zaffen silver member
    February 22, 2005
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    Succubus / Incubus??
    What a way to go.
    Nice write.
    At least you can't be disappointed.
    Be well;
    Zaffen


  • February 21, 2005
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    It's a very lovely piece. The rhythm is a little off in some areas but the rhyme helps that. Very cute ending.
    Thanks for entering and good luck

    ~Lunar


  • lordoftherings gold member
    December 19, 2004
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    I found the ending to be comical in a sense, almost like a irony to the rest of the poem. Perhhaps that made me enjoy it even better. Nice flow and rythm here, a few cliches and more imagery would refreshen it a bit. Gregg


  • shastadaisey123
    December 7, 2004
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    bravo...you earn my respect and applause, this is a perfect scenario and it gives me warm wigglies...good luck in the contest >>>

  • MsLaDyAvErAgE
    November 18, 2004
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    This was so beautifully written. Your words and the rhyming were right on time. I really don't know what else to say about this right now but I loved it from beginning to end.
    's
    LadyRage


  • April Renee
    October 21, 2004
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    the ending is sad, to me...i dont know...im slow...but..well written..the flow was great..worth the read

    ~*~blu~*~


  • silverscent gold member
    October 11, 2004
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    Great work. The main thing that struck me was the rhyming and rhythem, it was perfect. I felt like singing it as i read it, it had a very nice springy flow to it. Over all the poem was written very well too. I thought the ending was great hehe. Well done, fantastic poem. Keep it up.


  • x9Nocturnal9x
    October 11, 2004
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    I found this poem very inspiring..overall it was really well written..I always have a weak spot for rhyming poems and nothing seemed force..great job!

  • DevilsWrongHand
    October 11, 2004
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    WONDERFUL

    WoW this is wonderful!!!!!!!!! Keep up the great work!


  • Dishy
    October 11, 2004
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    good

    This was great .Some times its nice to leave the lights on

  • AVoiceWithin
    October 9, 2004
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    That was so wonderful!..sigh who doesn't dream of that special guy..lucky are those to find him. The last four lines for some reason made me like the poem that much more..kind of relaxed feeling..I don't know but I loved it! Thanks so much for entering
    -Jenn-
    Edited on Oct 09, 8:16 p.m. because ''.


  • kod3warrior
    April 3, 2004
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    this is a great poem. writings of love are so wonderful, and this is by far no exception. the joyful feelings you have in this piece can be easily scene, and are truly heart warming. i hope that the amazing person you speak of here will one day come into your life. keep up the outstanding job!

    Tonight my beautiful dream lover
    there are so many things for us to discover.
    A pleasant evening visit
    that could get quite explicit.
    Making passionate love all night long
    creating the sweet beautiful chords to our own song.

  • redheadchica06
    April 3, 2004
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    Very good write. The rhyming is good but the rhythm is a little choppy. You might want to make it flow a little more. But other than that, it's quite a touching poem. I like the imagery towords the end:
    creating the sweet beautiful chords to our own song.
    My sleep is your entrance key
    so now it's time for you to come find me.

    Very well done!


  • April 2, 2004
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    AWESOME

    I don't think I have enjoyed a poem I have read on here more than yours. Awesome! It is beautiful. Thank you so much. Leslie

  • xsiLeNceD sOuLx
    April 2, 2004
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    wow....this rhymes beautifully and is beautiful itself! great work! great flow!
    :+: brianne :+:


  • legendd
    April 2, 2004
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    beautiful and well written! ~sara

  • Joshua14
    April 2, 2004
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    Your last line is what made me decide that I truly enjoyed this poem. Something about it is so poignantly original in the context of this poem. Very nicely done and tastefully rhymed to boot!
    ~Cole


  • Shadow Kitsune
    April 2, 2004
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    Wow. This is good. I liked it. Loved it, actually. You are very good at expressing love. A dream lover was a wanderful topic. Beautiful poem. Great job! Bravo!


  • CIndyReed
    April 2, 2004
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    I love the rhyme is very flown, the amaze of hhope the waiting love, in sleep of rest during which consciousness of the world is suspended I quote you "My sleep is your entrance key
    so now it's time for you to come find me.
    You know the place
    and I'll leave the lights off just in case."
    just great work , take care

  • Soldier29
    April 2, 2004
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    Wow I write mostly love poems, but that blew my mind. Great write.

  • MyScorpioCurse
    April 2, 2004
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    Nice piece. I've never been good at rhyming, but you did an excellent job. Sweet, short, but descirptive, with a bit of metaphors running through it. A most lovely write. Thanks for sharing with us all.
    Peter/Pedro

  • Maryangel
    April 2, 2004
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    great!

    very passionate, made me think that I can't wait to see my boyfriend , jeje , good job ! it was very sweet to read this poem.


  • -Autumn-
    April 2, 2004
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    This is good, and a nice poem, it really shows your feelings very well, is well written, and well worded. The only complaint I have, however, is the rhyming sceme you have chosen. Rhyming couplets are a bit over done, and make your poem sound forced and slightly juvenile, and it really has a detrimental effect on this actually deep poem. Despite this though, a nice poem, well done.

    xxx Delta

  • lordoftherings gold member
    April 2, 2004
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    Montreal Standing Ovation

    \My sleep is your entrance key\

    Original *****/5 When I read that line I just dreamily descended for the ending of the poem...a romantic invitation...and yet, get ready because here is my analysis...who can not think that in the end you had a very wonderful orgasmic wet dream with the words and atmosphere you have created.

    Edited on Apr 02, 1:55 because 'It was suppose to be five stars'.


  • April 2, 2004
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    Beautifully Written

    Absolutely Beautiful! I agree it has beautiful rhythem.....very smooth and filled with much passion.And I think the last line was just the perfect touch for this write So much talent here. I hope to read more by you soon. Alexis

  • AsylumForMyMind
    April 2, 2004
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    I liked the ending. Yes, the lights off. Hahaha. Later.


  • pulsating
    April 1, 2004
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    GORGEOUS!!! beautiful rhythm , theme, love the last line...

  • aspasia
    April 1, 2004
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    I am so into these poems today. I love the way you expressed the passion of the dream lover and the reality of the dreams. Very good write. God Bless,Patty


  • fire-and-water
    April 1, 2004
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    aww how beautiful!! I love your poetry, the rhymes went together very well, didn't seem forced in the least!! Love the story, as well. great write.


  • TheJaedenBeast
    April 1, 2004
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    Oh yeah, it's all about the love baby, and you did a good job describing it.. good work, I like it!


  • SurrealistPoet
    April 1, 2004
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    very nice.. great write. i enjoyed it. expressive. its simpple, yet so passionate. again, i really enjoyed it. thanks for sharing! God Bless.


  • anna3
    March 31, 2004
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    I love how You expressed all You hunger of true passionate love comes. Great poem. Anna


  • March 31, 2004
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    i think it is deep and true to your heart

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