capture

we haven’t
travelled this slow before
                       the sky is still masked
               by powder silk satin

and eyes tiptoe
into hollows where
slumber aches with
                           solitude

   the happy dead
bob over skyline
and link light

to stretch twilight
       of moments
over lens and glossed paper

Author notes

prompt: Photo 1~ "Light's last breath" by YagaK

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Click 50: The big 5-0! by perfectsunset. 2750 points, ended September 8, 18 entries
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Macsword
September 27

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Excellent...
especially your second stanza. But the entire write is perfect and an excellent entry well done. Congrats on the HM.
perfectsunset
September 8

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Oh wow, this was just stunning.
Your imagery always feeds my mind
full & craving more. I love the
simplicity here, yet the complex
metaphor. Amazing work as always.

Best of luck & thanks for entering
birksy
August 19
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very nice. first two stanzas my personal favourites, great use of words. Love the shape of it. And even a tilda in the authors notes... perfection!!!
birksy
August 17
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Beautiful. I think the last full stop was the best one.
- silverscent
  August 19
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  lol... see I wasn't sure whether to leave that one in or not.
  Glad you liked it.
  Of course it's not finished yet, I was thinking about adding a comma or semi colon, I don't know, but maybe you could check back when I've added a bit more to it
- - birksy
    August 19
    
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    I'm glad you left it in. Would have been lost without it. semi-colon? really? I think it could do with something a little more exotic to spice it up - perhaps a curly bracket, or even my favourite, a tilda ~
    it says so much about someone... ;o)
    
    it's really shaping up to be a good one...