When darkness serenades the ebon night,
she swoons and pales, his kiss upon her lips,
where misty clouds sweep by like sailing ships,
we bid farewell the last lost rays of light.
There in his arms she gathers in the skies,
awakes the moon and stars to answer him,
until her bowers faint and senses swim,
a rose that blushes pink and softly dies.
Oh, drink the sweet liqueur of night's embrace,
that haven from the giddy light of day,
where slumber swiftly melts our cares away
and gaze upon the beauty of her face.
The darkness guards his lover jealously,
protecting her in realms of satin sea.
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How beautiful!!! Swooningly so! I love your judicious use of alliteration. "There in his arms she gathers in the skies" What a beautiful line! and that last line is so lovely!
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Critical Circle
I love this poem! It is mythic and beautiful in its metaphors.
My only real crit is the first line, because it reads to me as if the darkness is serenading the darkness, which is redundant. I think, if you could find some different two-syllable adjective to describe night, I'd be quite happy with the entire poem. Lovely work! -
A wonderful sonnet. The imagery is beautiful! Stunning!
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I agree wit motel about the riches of your words. Feelings within your words of poetry are so deep... and there are so much beaut in your ending part of this fine sonnet:
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Oh, drink the sweet liqueur of night's embrace,
that haven from the giddy light of day,
where slumber swiftly melts our cares away
and gaze upon the beauty of her face.
The darkness guards his lover jealously,
protecting her in realms of satin sea.
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~Sonja~
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Reading list poem
This is a lovely sonnet, thanks for your participation in our reading list activity.
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so rich in images and feeling ... gorgeous.
what a beautiful way to view to see nature's radiance.
thank you.
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This is so very beautiful. You have captured the night and the romance of two sweethearts.
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SO GENTLE, SWEET AND PASSIONATE!!!!
This just flows from your heart, touches that special someone and the beauty which is all around is shared by two.
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Ah, lovely. One little nit: do bowers faint? Maybe until in bowers faint her senses swim?? Take or leave - too great a sonnet to be diminished by one word and my picky logic. Beautiful language, beautiful poem.
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ive missed reading your sonnets, so full of imagery and always touching the depths of readers.
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Reading list
Beautiful and tender poem of love under the moonlit sky. Well crafted sonnet with good rhyme and flow. Thanks for sharing.
Brother Dennis
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Where in his arms ?
Not all enjoy the hypnagogic state
where slumber swiftly melts our cares away
for sleeplessness betimes becomes our fate
and satin sheets can't compensate, cares weigh.
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Absolutely beautiful imagery! This is a flawless sonnet. I loved it. A wonderful way to start my morning.
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