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Morning birds[Haiku]

early morning birds
argue by my window
-alarm clock

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Please give me any honest, helpful critiques. I really want to learn this form

Version 1.
early morning birds
chirp repeatedly
-alarm clock

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  • Purush
    August 23
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    nice

    NICE
    can l 3 be like this
    "to wake me up"
    to be more clear


  • azure85 gold member
    August 18

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    early morning birds
    argue by my window
    -alarm clock

    Very nice haiku, and has a great AHA moment. Good fragment and phrase, thank you so much!


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    August 17

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    I like this one from you. I go through this every single morning. It's either the sounds of my father's roosters crowing or the early morning birds that continuously fuss and argue outside my window. Wonderful work with this
    haiku and good luck to you with it here!




    Jeremy0826