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a taste of self deprecation

pretty girls pretty girls

                                              wear american apparel
                                                                                      and a mixture of vintage
                                      and
pretty girls pretty girls


                  roll out of bed with that hair
                                                                              and
pretty girls pretty girls

                                                                          don't sleep, they pamper
                                                  wear eye glasses from another era
pretty girls pretty girls


                                                                      know what to say
                                      have glamorous witty comebacks

pretty girls pretty girls



i want
to be


just
like
you.

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i wish this were false
in every way

oh, say what you mean

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  • acoustical
    August 18
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    thank you everyone


  • Phoetiquette
    August 18

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    I cant stand the bitches in your poem.
    we want to be them for all of two seconds and then it just falls flat. being real and three-dimensional, we doubt ourselves so much that its hard to even live with... that much doubt. You just want to pull out your hair with the envy you feel for some random girl wandering around dinkytown. but it just falls flat. everyone prefers you three-dimensional and hipster-trend free.


  • ilovebex
    August 17

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    i am killing this poem with fire because it's all lies. (i do like it though, and i relate. but you are a beautiful beautiful girl, physically AND mentally[even though i've only stalked photogs of you and relentlessly read your pomez], so believe me. i am right.)

  • mieles
    August 17

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    i like the repetition in the poem a lot and i like the line breaks. my one criticism is that i really like the words and i think, for me, the lay out detracts from the message.


  • cough drop creek
    August 17

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    in response to your a.n., so do I.

    "roll out of bed with that hair"
    i like how you said that line a lot.



  • Catie Sheeran gold member
    August 17

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    ah, very relatale...well Im not going to sit here and tell you "but you are pretty" b/c I know when I am feeling like this, I hate it when ppl say that to me...I always give em a dirty look and tell them to stop patronizing me. I always believed I had chickmunk cheeks. which makes me look fat no matter how skinny I am! lol

    hopefully it will pass one day and we will both be happy with our looks. (or not, since we are only getting older! yikes!...lol )

    great piece!


  • photoretinas
    August 16

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    i adore you. as is well-known, of course, YOU are very very pretty.

    ...but i've felt this way and have actually written a poem fairly similar to it, with a lot of play on the 'pretty' thing.

    so. i like this.
    cause i've THOUGHT THESE THINGS somanytimes and it's ALWAYS frustrating and demoralizing to have thoughts like that.

    because you know we should and we i hope do both know better than to measure ourselves so two-dimensionally. [that sentence sure was a mess]
    i love you.


  • sixtimesseven
    August 16

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    ohhh... but you are a pretty girl. and your hair always looks so good.
    american apparel is overrated. and you should always be you.


  • internal heights
    August 16

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    Hahaha 'oh, say what you mean.'

    I like that because I can't tell whether it's prompting a "but Brianna /you're/ (italics) a pretty girl or if you're trying to get people to yell at you. Maybe both.

    I love the sing song tone in contrast to the tiny undercurrent of exasperated self-loathing [<-too strong a word].

    I'm also glad you're writing again even if it is just to bash yourself. Honestly even that is a breath of fresh air to me on this site. At least with the tone you pulled off. Now that I think of it I read a lot of "oh em gee I hate me," but again, this poem sounds more like a humorous (albeit harsh) self-critique than a poorly written wallow.

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