Soft and beckoning shadows
In shades of pale moonlight,
The caress of gentle darkness
A gentle touch in the night
The soothing hands of slumber
Will touch a troubled brow,
And wipe away all sadness
That is the sandman's vow
So safe and warm in darkness
There in the velvet night,
Bathed in golden moonbeams
Caressed by soft star light
For sleep will soothe a troubled soul
And wipe away all fears,
Let the healing hands of dreams
Dry up the lonely tears
The tender kiss of an early dawn
There in the morning light,
For only memories will remain
Of elusive dreams in the night
Author notes
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Please tell me what you think
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What a joy to read.
It is written somewhere that Joy Comes in the Morning. If we can just make it through the night. The rhythm and rhyme of this poem are superb. I really enjoyed it.
Favorite lines: Soft and beckoning shadows
In shades of pale moonlight,
The caress of gentle darkness
A gentle touch in the night
The soothing hands of slumber
Will touch a troubled brow,
And wipe away all sadness
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Cool!!
This is very great. I like the flow of words and the message. Very nice rhymes. I love this. Good job and a veeeeery Nice write!!! ^_^
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This poem feels like a warm balm to a troubled soul. It is very soothing and warming. Lovely job on this. It feels as if your pen has been touched by God himself as I read it. Leaves the reader with a superb emotional glow. Thanks for sharing your beauty.
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This was reaaly nice and great to see you again.
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The picture could be a poem in itself.
I loved the imagery in this especially the lines..
The soothing hands of slumber
Will touch a troubled brow,
And wipe away all sadness
That is the sandman's vow
Beautiful, I'm pretty sure this is about dreams
Great poem! 9/10, congrats
Thanks for entering
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beauty
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Many thanks for the wonderful comment
Hugs
Susan~~~
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imagery rich and such a sinch.....and a lynch that stabbed the deep meaning in like celestial intercourse.Loved the subtle imagery here: this one:The soothing hands of slumber -
You are so good at these, sis. Your imagery is fantastic and the rhyme is perfect. This is such a peaceful write...Best of luck in the contest.
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Wow~
You go on Sis with that rhyme
Wahooooooooooo~
This is a Beauty and Love reference to
elusive dreams...
Sigh~~~~
The Image is Strong and I keep wanting
to hear more
Gosh I am having a Feng Shui moment
Keep that quill dancing Beautiful
Thank You for sharing Your Talent
Best wishes in the contest
with love & light~ Desire~*~
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This is lovely and made me smile. You have use a wonderful tetrameter that makes this poem roll off the lips like honey.
Love,
Amera
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This poem is so beautiful and peaceful. Could be a magical lullaby soothing one to sleep. Yes sometimes we escape into the dream world to be with those we miss and when we wake up we want to go back to sleep again to bring back the magic and comfort. Thanks for sharing your amazing talents, I so enjoyed reading this morning. Never put down your pen!
Thanks for visiting one of my poems and leaving behind such wonderful comments they mean the world to me.
Hugs,
Theresa
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Love this poem! Very nicely done, Sis! ***** (5 stars out of 5)
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Maureen
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Humm..this is beautifully stated story of the life..and the immages and the words brings the beauty of your poetry and the beauty of this great nature as well..well done..Thank you so much for sharing it..
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A beautiful fantasy indeed! You didn't even need the picture since the write created such magical imagery. Wonderfully penned! I enjoyed it to the fullest!
Safely hidden in the darkness,
~ The Rocker Who Lost All -
Wow. Excellent poem. You did a fantastic job with the rhyming in this. Absolutely beautiful. Best of luck in the contest.
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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That's where I want to be. Resting in the peace of the night. I love nigh time. It is peaceful under the moonlight and stars. You created that same tranquility with this piece.
My only critique is the use of gentle twice in the first stanza. I think it would be better if a synonym was chosen for one.
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Ah, sleep the healer,
Susan, the angel of words,
what a great combination
to create a peaceful caressing poem.Love and hugs to you,
M-C
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Truly beautiful Susan..flows wonderfully and creates a soothing effect while reading. Love the image as well. I especially liked the 2nd stanza..Great work and I wish you all the best of luck.
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beautiful I love the second stanza! what a lovely flow in this poem...and it fit the picture so well! wonderful penning friend
btw: stunning ending
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Wonderful
what a great use of rhyme. Oh my you did great with this one. Best of luck in the contest
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