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Savor

Slowly, slowly
Take your time
Sense the scent, breathe deep, savor, exhale
Slim fang bared, approach with patience
(Breathe deep, savor, exhale)
Carefully, touch the skin like Sleeping Beauty prick
Let it fall
Follow the path with eyes, lips, mouth
Tongue trailing down to catch that gorgeous bead
A red so deep, so pure, the color can only be called

Blood.

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A vampire's thoughts when biting a (presumably willing) victim, able to take his time, for once.

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  • FarEdgeOfTheBox
    August 17
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    Oh, this is hot...

    "Tongue trailing down to catch that gorgeous bead"

    I love that.