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Broken Wing

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Down the halls of school she walked, few even knowing her name

 those who did only used it for their own fun and games

Day by day she withered, longing for it to end

 a sadden child rejected, her dog her only friend

Beauty consumed her inside and out or so her mother said

 why couldn't others see it, oh how she wished she were dead

Every day beside her dog, she sat in the yard to sing

 a beautiful child with a matching voice that flew with a broken wing

If only any noticed, she'd be such a loyal friend

 beauty with a broken heart that only friendship could mend

A short moment in time not to be forever, she heard her mother say

 a gifted child that you are, you will have your day

Years past by, some things changed, friends had only been few

 always leaving a knife in her back, oh yea, this was new

The day came when she realized, her name was completely smeared

 she moved away to start the life she'd longed for year after year

Last month I went to see her, only a year after she'd wed

 she took me out to meet her friends, there were many as she'd said

The moment came, her name was called and she began to sing

 many loved her and were awed at my child with the broken wing

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

HAPPY LITTLE PROMPTS
by lindaburns

3. Children you can be proud of
. . . .



Written for the contest- One Day Quickie "Rejection"
Inspired by my daughter's strength and courage to overcome the cruelty in this world.

Background credit goes to pygar.deviantart.com
Still working on finding out about the image. If anyone knows, please let me know.

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  • Beautiful-N-Broken silver member
    November 15

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    Oh my gosh, this has such a beautiful ending. Your daughter seems to be doing so well now. I'm proud for you and for her. You both have been so strong and pulled through together. There's nothing like the bond between a mother and a child. I love this. Great write!


    • GuiltedShadow gold member
      November 15

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      Thank you. She is so strong and beautiful just like her voice when she sings. It makes grown men cry. I'm so glad she joined the site and writes as well. She is a great writer and has many talents.


  • dezney
    October 30
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    great poem


  • UncleDunk gold member
    October 20

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    There is one line in this poem that outshines all the rest. It uses all the right words, in all the right places - is simple, yet beautiful. I stopped there before resuming, and soaked in the emotions of that one line. I left that line the richer for waiting. Sounds silly how one line can do that to me, but there it is.


    "a beautiful child with a matching voice that flew with a broken wing"


  • Poetic-Theorem silver member
    October 17

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    This is such an inspirational piece
    I can tell just how proud you are over your daughter
    She sounds very brave in overcoming obstacles in our often cruel world
    I shall have to visit her page as well

    My daughter is getting married in 3 days
    Gosh, they grow up quickly but always makes us proud
    Thanks so much for sharing

    David


    • GuiltedShadow gold member
      October 17
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      Please do visit her page. She is my heart. All my kids are, but Mandi had struggled so hard. She's the most like me. She feels everything with a passion. Love, hate, pain, everything.
      And... You will most likely cry more at your daughter's wedding than you did when she was born. You'll have a lot of flashbacks of her birth while she's going down the isle though.


  • lindaburns gold member
    October 17

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    HAPPY LITTLE PROMPTS

    The sentiments here are touching and the story is sad with a happy ending.  Congratulations on the trophies!! Thank you for entering my contest.


  • Broken--dreams
    October 14
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    That's Really Beautiful =) Great write


  • MutilatedMe
    October 13
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    awe

    Very sweet and heart felt...I enjoyed reading this.


  • wave1080
    October 8
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    awwww !

    beautiful


  • poeticweaver gold member
    October 7

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    What a potent piece that moves the heart. Such a cherished soul must have been to bright for others to see what was, and is within. How we need to stop, and make sure these angelic voices are heard. What a beautifully penned poem, thanks for sharing..

    Much love, Timothy

  • reveller silver member
    October 2

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    That was

    a lovely written poem and I enjoyed it very much. If only our children new how much we worry for them! School days can be so cruel...I am glad that wing is on the mend.


  • Dezzy26
    September 29

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    This is a beautiful piece you have here... brought a tear to my eye. Reminds me of my little wounded sister.... good penning this poem. I applaud you.

    Dezzi

    • GuiltedShadow gold member
      September 29
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      Thank you. This is about my daughter. One of the strongest women I know.


  • foreveryourslove
    September 29

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    nice job very much apperciated thank you for entering this piece into my contest i just loved it i give you the bestest of luck in my contest tooo....

  • CeilidhaChaos
    September 15
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    Very nice!

    Very nice. Reminded me of me.

    • GuiltedShadow gold member
      September 15
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      Thank you. I hope you've had a happy outcome as my daughter has.

      • CeilidhaChaos
        September 21
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        she's lucky to have a mother like you..


        • GuiltedShadow gold member
          September 21
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          Thank you for that comment, but I'm not so sure. You'd have to read some more of my poems to understand. Most of them are about my kids and me and our horrindous experiences.


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    September 11

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    You do go through hardships, but stick with it and keep your head high and you can make it through to a wonderful life. Nice message here.

    ♥
    whisper


  • Kathraina silver member
    September 10

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    Wow, very good job with this write!
    I love the imagery here, and the rhyme flows very well!
    Nicely done

    Bravo and thank you for entering



    ♥ kate


  • Carly Pop gold member
    August 31
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    wow

    speechless.....


  • Florida Sunshine
    August 30

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    Not only teenagers in school can be cruel to other, but adults too. They mock another to make themselves feel better about them. Do they realize the pain they cause? Luckily your poem shows how, looking for a friend even through a pet, that you can flourish. It also exhibits the effects of teasing can be torturous to another. I wish more people could see the wings they are breaking.

    Nice job on getting the message out. Thank you for entering the contest, it was my pleasure having you here. I will be judging as quickly as possible.


  • lil mama lesa
    August 29

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    im still going threw this i have not many friends im nice sweet an kind but yet most cant see this within me


    • GuiltedShadow gold member
      August 30
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      Hold your head high honey. Don't let them see it hang. Friends may be few but they will prove to be true. Better to have a few good apples than a barrell full of rotton ones.


  • Symphony.of.Silence
    August 29

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    this is so sad and so well written, I can feel the broken heart and the crushed dreams in this poem. I can see why you won gold you deserve it! Wonderful write and really captured a shattered soul within a child.


    • GuiltedShadow gold member
      August 29
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      Thank you. This really was a true story. My daughter said she cried when she read it. I'm so proud of her accomplishments. She was the inspiration for this write.


  • LonelyAngel
    August 28

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    This was such an amazing read. I loved your style and the rhymes were so great. I am guessing you made the background too because I fell in love with that. You portrayed such wonderful words, language and emotion in a rather small piece.It is really touching, and beautiful! It is truely great how you have shown the emotions of a child and what they feel.

    Well done on such a beauty, I could not ask for much better reads!

    xYx


    • GuiltedShadow gold member
      August 28
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      Thank you. I appreciate the compliment. I was able to express her emotions, bc I feel what my children feel. We truely have a gifted bond.

  • mjm1495
    August 23

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    wow u picked the right contest because that was amazing. I was a little skeptical at first with the background choice but this was an awesome poem, the ryhme, the emotion, everything was flawless. Best of luck in the contest


  • Gypsy Via Orleans
    August 23

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    Th words, the picture, the feelings from the words and picture are so touching.
    Your poem shows how love can change a life. I also like your author notes. I;m very pleased your daughter has finally found her place. It makes me as a mother feel good to know a child no an adult has found happiness that is everyone's right. You've penned this beautiful so well. Good luck in the contest.


  • Candice Bezanson
    August 23

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    "beauty with a broken heart that only friendship could mend"

    It is so hard for adults to remember how important it is as a child to feel accepted and loved by our peers. This was a struggle I had as well when I was younger. This told a beautiful story of growing up and finding your own place to be. thank you very much for sharing and please don't forget to include the title of the poem you commented on :0) Thank you!


  • Deaths Prayer
    August 19

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    That was every sweet and anjelic piece. made me want to be angel for the night good job!!


  • blacwyn
    August 17

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    Beautiful

    I think you realize how touching this is, and for the record, you penned this wonderfully. You let the reader see a side of you the in your other writes that has not been shown yet. You have true love for people and what they represent.


  • lolagirl
    August 17
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    beautiful poem. awesome


  • SpydurPoet gold member
    August 17
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    This was such a beautiful and heartwrenching poem. Please please please, for the love of all things holy, add 2 more lines. The contest was for a 20 line poem.
    Thanks for entering the contest and best of luck.
    Write on.
    ~*~SP~*~


    • GuiltedShadow gold member
      August 17
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      Hey on my page, it shows up as 20 lines. If I add 2 more, it'll show 22. Let me know if you still see 18.


      • SpydurPoet gold member
        August 17

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        OMIGOSH!!! I am so so sorry!! When I hit line numbers below the comment box, it shows 18...it's weird. I am so sorry!


  • xbonniemichellex
    August 16

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    This is A M A Z I N G!!!! I hope that you do really well in the contest! I love how the background so perfectly matches the poem, it ties everything together so it all makes since. =]

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