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Untitled Nonsense

SCREAMING
though my crippling tale
anger enrages my mangled life
love and betrayal forever stale
cuts within my soul made with your own inner knife

REDEEMING
all my past regrets
with lingering emotions
I dwell with shadows cast upon myself
giving a sadistic smile on rare occasions

DREAMING
Of a place where there's no past
thinking of things that couldn't last
wanting an end to all this pain
now I'm dreaming in the rain







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  • Emerald-Spirit
    October 11

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    Very creative. I love the rhyming, it flows really well. This is the first of your pieces that I have read. Great impression, I will definitly read more! XemX


  • sarah-michelle
    August 29
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    Wow this is really great ...... Good write i love the way u did this !!!!


  • Camille R Castillo
    August 18

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    Absolutely Wonderful

    I think it is a wonderful expression of emotions, and I wouldn't change anything about it. A truly amazing poem. Keep writing

    ~Camille


  • Horcrux.Breathing
    August 17

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    Woaw such a beautiful masterpeice so deep so much power and emotion used here I just love it
    the flow and ryhme scheme is fantastic its just amasing

  • Ilovewriting
    August 16

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    I loved it. You don't need no criticism. You don't need to revise it. Its perfect the way it is. Your wonderful at writing poetry. Two thumbs on that one. Keep going on your awesome poetry. Pretty cool.

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