I observe thoughts as I know; their meaning's sometimes unclear,
And though the mind goes astray, there's always a shore near,
My words and my thoughts are the breaths I received from my god,
He is the one who hones me, my loving and benevolent lord...!
The reasons of my writing are sometimes apparently misread
And I have heard people say that words are actions, but dead
I see the words as more than just, fuel for actions of all kind
And the thoughts and feelings as, the need and want of mind!
Though these thoughts and feelings are, viewed as a tempest
And the road that leads to peace is alleged an unfeasible quest
There must be a subtle reason, because the Mind is His creation,
And He wouldn't make it as a weapon meant for our destruction!
I offer my humble words as prayers for, peace and satisfaction
And for the joy and the bliss - with an everlasting true devotion.
I love the world where I live my life, with all its pains and gains
And I bow in love to the Great Creator who never ever fails…!
I am nothing but a medium; He sings the rhyme in my ears
He makes all my emotions and feelings that roll down as tears
So who am I to feel proud for feats I that haven't even done?
I give up my life and pains for the intentions of the Great One...
Author notes
This tells a lot about me, my attitude towards life, and
( people say I hope, think, love, and care rather a lot...though I think I am doing nothing but being me)
it also tells I believe that the God, whoever and whatever he is, has given me life to live and enjoy but for a greater purpose.I am finding that purpose...(I sometimes feel I have found it though)
(it also tries to answer a question I was asked once - "Why do you write? Isnt it waste of energy, energy which could be used to do some work?" the question was phrased like this, but in my mother tongue)
anyways, thanks for reading...!
love,
-pranj
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Finely done poet..
Your first stanza is an excellent opening to the wonderful words that follow. You tell us much about yourself in a very forthright way without any vanity.
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The final verse struck me in particular. We are all some type of receivers capable of picking up a minute measure of the infinite amount of energy being transmissted through space time. Dennett already years ago concluded that awareness trails the physical and mental preparation of the brain that leads to action. It suggests that we are to some level being directed by an outside source. This assumption is confirmed by the work of Poponin and Gariaev (among many). There seems to be an overall, organizing principle in this multiverse that determines all events. Einstein's suggestion that this the universe / multiverse is deterministic in nature, all be it that the complexity of this view has tremendously increased over the years (after E past away). Great work once again. Take care.
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Incredible!!
I love this piece, and I commend anyone who is brave enough and true enough in their faith to announce it so clearly. I, however, do beg to differ on one thing... lol Sometimes I think the mind is the enemy (though not all the time) you see even just last night.. I found myself praying that my mind would stop thinking because I couldn't stop it, and it was giving me a massive migraine... and after praying ... it finally stopped... and I could get some sleep. I love to be able to think as much and as deep as I do, but sometimes it's a literal pain. But this is a really great write, and you sound like a very great person. Keep up the fantastic work!!
~Gin
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every powerful 'thing' can be used to destroy or towards the path of greatness...!
and mind is a monkey, a mad monkey, it has to be controlled, but not frowned upon or despised!
thanks, jin...
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That's hysterical... lol
I never considered my mind to be a 'monkey' before, maybe a volcano, but a monkey is original. lol
z
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Wonderful explanation of my your beliefs, and since you have contacted me on how to write for this...it is wonderful pranj, you and I already read each others work...I just didn't realize there was a AP son under my nose, I have to make some adjustments, I am closing this contest it appears someone got a very sick idea of what my contest was about, so I rather not upset anyone else before it really upsets me.
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Thanks for the comment, the poem was from my heart, its an honest and simple write, I am happy you found it good!
love,
-pranj
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Simply beautiful..
aah, I was going to enter this contest with a poem similar to this...
But as I read over this poem I realized that I have no chance against someone such as yourself. This was an amazing write, and you were obviously given the talent to write for a reason. I often feel the same way, and I hope I can reach your caliber some day. Good luck with everything!
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I am honored, I am very very happy that you find my poem good...
Thanks for those words of encouragement, sometimes these words pull you out of a dark pit of misunderstanding. Though I assure you my talent or skill is nowhere near some of the people here on AP! thanks a million.
love,
-pranj
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Fantastic write! Though I love the whole thing the part the stickes out to me is the second paragraph...I totally agree with that. Like always your writes are great, and I can always relate to it. Great job!
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Thank you my dear, I am happy you can relate to it...
love,
-pranj
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