Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read Contests Groups Learn Forums Store Help
 

spacial paranoia ///sepia sterility

     

                                       

                                                      p-a-p-e-r  d-o-l-l
                                                               
origami



s
i
l
h
o
u
e
t
t
e

                   
                      {s t r u n g  o u t)                {cut out}            {=left out=}

shelve her
sell her
store her

outside
turquoise mason
jar//s far-e
                  d
                    g
                      e

                                  a m a r a n t h i n e  e y e s

cigarette butts
                                       
ground ....................................        d
                                                                    r
                                                                      o
                                                                          w
                                                                            n
                                                                              e
                                                                                d

in acid pain
s/t/a/i/n/e/d
tartred rain

                                                            putrified  {i c i c l e} disdain

mind:  her  v  e  n  u  s    fly    t/r/a/p

p-r-e-y-i-n-g m-a-n-t-i-s                          sights                  [ghostofmidnight]

invites...incites..bites....

solipsistic
dollies itch

                                                         
          a                                                             
lick the popsicle
        c    l
    s        e
up              bitch
                                                                    hide//ride// head down
the porcelain finger
..... ..... ........ ..... bottomless  black hole

                                                  discern the burn: {self-hatred}...isolation's manacle.

Author notes

No. 2 ---> http://bylaauraa.deviantart.com/art/Thinking-about-it-133465856
75 words
the killer burn of : anorexia

A contest entry

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments


  • Kathraina silver member
    August 17

    Edit | Reply
    Really good dirty pretty here!
    I like your take on the prompt. The imagery and emotions here are raw and vivid.
    Marvelously done!
    Bravo and thank you for entering


    ♥ Kate


  • Thomas Scott gold member
    August 17

    Edit | Reply

    Okay, okay, okay.

    Sometimes it works.
    You had me cutting out paper dolls and then it seemed okay that letters and lines ran all over the place.
    I don't like dirty/pretty. I don't respect the affected.
    But I kinda like this.

    without prejudice

  • wow.... what a great display of dirty/pretty...! this is awesome!