Round thine waves aswirl, myne spirit resides;
Entranc'd by silvery pearls to beguile.
Where swells hasten'd, midnight velvet confides
In dreams ashore, etch'd upon her froth smile.
A truth -- e're this is, awash in sapphire;
From whence it came, o’erflown with seaborne wine.
Euphoria rains with emblazon'd fire.
Hath thee found harmony adrift so fine?
Thy beauty transc'nds e’en when tempests shriek;
Thy spirit delights in storms ignit'd.
Ah, thy silk gaze shines where skies vault'd speak;
Myne love for seas; thine gift unrequit'd.
Swashed in ... aloft with thee, I shall set sail.
Sea swell -- O sea swell, tell me thy tale.
Author notes
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A Shakespearean sonnet (also referred to as an English sonnet) is comprised of 4 quatrains rhyming abab cdcd efef, followed by one couplet rhyming gg. Each line must be written in just 10 syllables, no more, no less. The final rhyme must provide some closure in the poem.
This poem strictly professes my love for the sea at its best. I use personification and metaphor in my poetry quite often, especially when I write about the sea.
Photo credit: http://oregonartteacher.deviantart.com/art/Winter-Stories-09-Wet-Velvet-110272542
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Please feel free to offer constructive comments, as I welcome those.
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Thank you so much. The sea is what inspires my writing most. I love this line of yours: "walking through a magical forest while it rains diamonds."
Get well wishes to you.
Don -
your vocabulary is amazing and how you put this together is like walking through a magical forest while it rains diamonds. so beautiful.
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Wonderful...
Intriguing composition. I like everything here. "Sea of Midnight Velvet" is on the line to be Excellent.
I see Geoffrey Chaucer's time language here, and my point is: The every college student can't read this poem. Once the arcaic is replaced it will glow.
In respect and admiration,
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU
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Thank you so much, Andre.
I wish I could give you my normal 5 stars for your comments, but my computer won't let me rate comments lately. Thankfully, I'm getting a new computer in a few months, so that won't be such a headache for me then. I like to give credit to poets when they comment.
I know that Olde English doesn't suit everyone, but I enjoy writing it. It's a tip of the hat to some of my favorites like Shakespeare and John Keats. This month, however, I'm writing poetry with modern language. I enjoy writing poetry using sea metaphors most of all. I fluctuate once in a while with my writing styles to keep my muse energized.
Don
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Magical!
I love your sonnets
they are as good as any I've ever read...
I hope to see a compilation of all these
works in a book one day...I would stand in line
to buy it...
Thank you for sharing this darkly enchanting piece
Congrats on the shiny!
~Pastel
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nice imagery and some lovely metaphors you have written.
I just I love this picture... Well deserved Gold... xxx -
This is a well-crafted sonnet, containing imagery and interesting word-usage.
Congratulations on the Gold!
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Oh this is a treat...
Another perfectly executed & beautifully penned sonnet...
You have such mastery over this poetry form as to fair leave your reader breathless in its wake...
Impressive as always...
Keep up the good work...
Well done!!!
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I'm struck nearly speechless with this piece!
Brilliant write true to Shakespearean form, which is hard for many poets to do.
I am astounded by the metaphors you have here. Very beautiful write over all
Bravo and thank you for entering
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Youve certainly got the gift of this art and the story was beautiful i could see the sea crashing on the beack and the froth of the waves excellent dear friend im impressed
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Thank you very much, Glenn.
I just recently started writing sonnets. Free verse and haiku are what I've written mostly up until now. I could write about the sea forever.
Don
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An amazing treat for the mind. A written delight that causes visuals to swim in my imagination. Alas I am on the gulf again.....vision to the eye; pen in hand; ink to transfer this muse onto the pad held tightly. If only I could create something as beautiful as this, Word Smith.
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This poem is big. How do I say this....it's huge! Metaphor beautifully wrung out, and the Billy Shake language is spot on. The ending has that "come what may....onward!" feel to it. Really great.
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Thank you, Steve.
What I really enjoy with your comments is how motivating they are for me to read. I always feel like a million bucks from them. I just started writing form poetry, and this was only my second sonnet, so it goes double this time.
Don
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EXCELLENT WORK
i LOVE THIS - you reminded me that I should be writing of the sea aghhh inspired me again as this has gone quiet in my mind....need to do a dive meh!! I love the rhythm in this, the rhyme scheme is very good and it all flows so beautifully with very good imagery great work xx
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This is absolutely brilliant. I love English sonnets and you have done fanatically with this. I can feel the movement of the nighttime tides with this beautiful poem. Your work is very inspiring.
peace
cassie
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SIGH! WOW! This is beyond words. OMG! I felt I was in the midst of the moon above clear water, feeling so free and sensual and in a world I have never known. I am in awe. Exquisite Sonnet, dear.
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Thank you again.
You read the unfinished version of this poem. I forgot to copy and paste the last two lines until just now. I sure am glad I had it written down in my journal. I couldn't remember what I'd written without it. I'm just about finished with another Shakespearean sonnet called SAPPHIRE WALTZ. I'll get that one up tomorrow. I love the chance to use Olde English whenever I can.
Don
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nice AN...but I don't see your name...10 minutes of a DQ
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It's there, at least, my user name is.
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Oh lol
duhh. I wouldnt DQ you
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smiling...
I'm very new to both form and rhyme, so I sure appreciate it.
Don
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Such words you come up with, inspiring, just beyond words the way you describe things. I love the ocean so this is moving me to all kinds of heights. Excellent. Blessings.
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