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Soaked In Sorrow

Beautification balances with perfection


      climbing over mountain tops
and little by little

          reaching destiny
until the climate changes


small movements create disaster
reality sinks in, he couldn't save her


A smell that only attracts

flies and maggots
fills the air


What about the promises of tomorrow?

Nevermind

It doesn't matter anymore.

 

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  • PrincessOfFire
    September 26

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    Sometimes nothing can save another and sadness is a hard emotion to deal with. One word told it all, NEVERMIND, reality is there. Keepon penning. Rose


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    August 26

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    Damn

    "A smell that only attracts
    flies and maggots
    fills the air" --> I just want to cry reading those lines and than the final three lines certainly make a few tears tip over

    Tugs at the heartstrings babes!

    Congratulations on the Bronze
    ♥
    Stay safe
    ~Manda


  • Melee Vau gold member
    August 18

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    liked this poem, especially the concept that things gradually change from magestic heights to deathly despair. very well written


  • Kathraina silver member
    August 17

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    Fantastic job with this piece, I love what you've done with the prompt.
    Love the alliteration in "Beautification balances." Its a nice start to the rest of the piece
    I like how each line seems to tell a story.
    Bravo and thank you for entering



    ♥ Kate


  • individuality gold member
    August 17
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  • Poetic Tasha Moderators member
    August 16

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    nice twist near the end miss,
    well done

    Tasha

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