the hurt I'm feeling deep inside
most things I try so hard to hide
nor whisper thru my lonely sighs
as silent tears fall from my eyes
if you would take the time to look
this heart would be an open book
my feelings there for you to see
behind the smiles, the real me
the hurt I'm feeling deep inside
as silent tears fall from my eyes
most things I try so hard to hide
nor whisper thru my lonely sighs
if you would take the time to look
behind the smiles, the real me
this heart would be an open book
my feelings there for you to see
Author notes
This is the first thing I've written in so long and I know it isn't all that good but for your first contest after so long I had to try...
Please tell me what you think
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brilliant
made me think so hard..that I was pained and stymied for emotions -
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Thank you for your beautiful comment. I'm pleased that my words moved you so deeply.
Margaret
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Sad nd Beautifull
I feel your pain
I understand completely
thanks for sharing
xoxo
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So sad.. I know this feeling well hun. I always try to be strong and happy and positive for others. Well, this week, I just couldn't and spent the whole week in bed drained.
I think this is beautifully and sadly written.
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Brilliant.
All the best dear.
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It has been a long time since you wrote anything Sis and it is a rhyming one too
You've done a great job. It flows smoothly and you have penned a lot of emotion in to it.
I wish you well in the contest 
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It's an interesting form and reads well which ever of the ways you wrote it. Sometimes we hide behind masks which other's aren't capable or removing or seeing behind and thus the pain may be accentuated more. Good luck in the contest with this
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