Looking out over the valley to the mountains beyond. The rain had stopped, and the sun burned like wildfire on the western edge of the sky, washing Dragoons in an unlikely candy-pink light. She heard the creek at the foot of flats churning and bubbling in blue shadows yards below her feet. A month's rain has sprouted seed in rocky soil, grass fringed paths with colored plains in vegatable blush. This land's bones smelled fresh as spring's first day, but the skin was new.
She stood over her husband's grave, crouched at its foot where a dozen different thoughts had been jostled on the way to her tongue. Her friend's image no longer something to be frightened of...let revelations fall where they will. Fire, flood, robbery land swindles and political feuds. The town swayed between death and riches, it's people fought each other for every advantage. Some turned power into blood and stone as a weapon. The warm quivery feeling in her chest was happiness, smiled down at David's marker; knowing everything will be alright.
Water welled up or trickled down some where to form a oval at her feet, as if a miniature bowl of evening sky. Water appearing from no where, to disappear as a conjurers trick was not unusual. The sun set was over, she turned back towards town as a new vision captured her mind moving towards a different destiny.
Subtle colors of the hills
time travelled a broken line
dust raising from desert
Author notes
This is my first try at a haibun (prose poetry finished with a haiku)
A contest entry
- Anything in prose by Hikari Lady.
1100 points, ended August 24, 24 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Lovely Dan
For your first attempt you did wonderful. Your prose was filled with lovely and heartfelt imagery and you haiku was stunning. A delight to read. This deserved a Gold
my dear friend. Hugs and Smiles across the many miles. .
Always Sandy
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Lovely, liked the haiku you added at the end. The images you put in my mind were new to me and I pictured the emotions, this was a very well penned piece. Thanks for entering and good luck.
Love
~Noor -
ah the haibun, i have a few in file of this, and this form i reckon suits your style of writing as i know you like to delve into the descriptive ways - a great piece, full of flavour.
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Wonderful
Very descriptive and so well written. such a great creation for the prompt. And great worded prose. Best of luck in the contest
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