Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

Soul Ring

Dear Friends,
I need to show you the realm beyond the skies
So lay down here beside me and slowly close your eyes
We'll drift away together beneath a golden moon
Don't think about the journey, for we will return soon.

You see the sail boat waiting, it's anchored off the shore
To take us all to peaceland where hopes are evermore
Lets climb aboard the vessel and raise the sails so high
They reach into the heavens and wave the world goodbye.

The mists of time are floating around our weary heads
Look down and see a glimpse now, as we sleep on our beds
As poets join together, and words dance in the air
We feel a jolt of magic that wipes away despair.

No hands across the ocean are needed as we see
A land that isn't broken become reality
Where thoughts are put together to make the future whole
A unity of spirits, at last become one soul.

Refreshed, we will awaken to face a brand new day
Remembering the moment, that words can never say.
When souls were joined together to form a loyal band
The ring of friendship offered, so slip it on your hand.




A contest entry

Please tell me what you think

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments

1 - 12 of 12

  • aboomer silver member
    August 21

    Edit | Reply
    Lovely journey you have painted in this. Great images and emotion....makes one want to join you!
    I much enjoyed this. Nicely done.

    thank you for your entry (and continued support!)
    best wishes in the contest

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    August 21

    Edit | Reply
    This is high on my list of favorites as always you penned beauty here thank you for taking the time to enter our contest and supporting us best wishes to you always.


  • islekine gold member
    August 20

    Edit | Reply

    As usual...well, well penned!

    I enjoyed the theme you chose this week! Very heartfelt sentiments. I enjoyed taking this trek with you! Best wishes in the contest and always!
    Write on and on!

    and


  • aphoenix
    August 17
    Edit | Reply
    this is a lovely write - I like the message in it, the feeling of friendship, peace and love.
    best wishes in the contest


  • frownsnfreckles
    August 15

    Edit | Reply
    One can never become jaded enough not to appreciate sentiments like these. No matter how hard you try to resist you find yourself lining up to board that boat to the stars! Nice rhyme and metre, works very well in quatrains, a lovely read!!


  • BlankCanvas500
    August 15

    Edit | Reply
    beautifully wriiten. the flow is exsquisite and i simply adore your theme here. good luck in the contest, i have no doubt you will do well. this is a truely inspirational write, fantastic and utterly delightful! =] and by the way u've actually got the correct use of the word where lol, if i read it correctly.


  • Apocalyptic Scarves
    August 15

    Edit | Reply
    i'll start off by saying, i don't remember clicking on the poem... wierd,b ut since i'm stuck here i'm gonna read it!

    in the last stanza the second to last line, you used the incorrect form of where, it should were

    I'm not a huge fan of rhyme and form, but this was nice, had some very nice images, and all the rhyme sounded nice and fresh.

    nicely writte, and a nice find for me considered i stumbled in on acciden


  • katz
    August 15

    Edit | Reply

    Wonderful!

    These are my favorite lines:

    "When souls where joined together to form a loyal band
    The ring of friendship offered, so slip it on your hand."

    They are my favorite because they are so true!

    This poems sings. It's like a bed time song.
    I really liked it!

1 - 12 of 12