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moretimes than not

  more times than not
without even a thought
words that have been said
forgotten faster then they fled
yet
somehow given the chance
unknowing as tho in a trance
waves put into motion
create familar unseen emotions

A contest entry

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  • Blue-Rose Beauty
    November 22
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    more times than not
    without even a thought

    Hm.. nice emotion in this, but the entire rhyme seemed awkward and forced.

    Thanks for entering.

    4/10

    - Blue beauty