I waited in the car
while you went inside,
It was taking so long
though I didn't know the time...
All I really knew was
you weren't coming back,
hours passed by and
the sky turned black...
I could see in her window
as the lights turned off,
With still no sign of you
My mind filled with thoughts...
Thoughts I didn't want to think
but you were not in sight,
and I was left to freeze
in the car alone tonight...
I knew she wouldn't let you go
she's always in control,
your divorce is now in progress
so from her I never stole...
I move to get out
and walk up to the door,
I'll see what this is all about
what am I waiting for?
I'm ringing the bell
a nervous wreck,
you answer the door
with a hickey on your neck...
My glare means nothing
as you ask why I'm here,
I respond with such anger
for everyone to hear...
Your wife approaches you
and you hold her close,
"Whats going on?" she asks,
I then become morose...
"I'm in love with your husband,
we meant to leave tonight,"
I told her of our plan
but she doesn't want to fight...
You shake your head at me
and ask me to leave,
You don't know who I am
now what should I believe?
I pull out a picture of
me and you embracing,
your wife says its photoshoped
and my heart starts racing...
"I'll call the cops, psycho,"
and you're sending me away,
my anger starts to boil
I know I'll make you pay.
I find a book of matches
and hide in your back yard,
I start the fire and let it rise,
payback isn't hard...
Tomorrow's morning paper shows
the fire - it was wild!
Pronounced dead are you and your wife....
and your guys' unborn child....
Author notes
This peom has nothing to do with me, I was just going for a thought-provoking story....Let me know what you think!
What do you think?
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Yes! well written, there is a calmness to the write, even though it rings true to many people. Good writing, lots of talent here...ian.
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OMG I don't even now what to say; I felt for the arsonist until the last line about the unborn child. That baby will never get to live because some jerk drove his lover to maddness...
Very well done
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Thanks! it was inspired by a tv show i'm hooked on where the husband has been with his mistress and just when his wife was about to tell him she's pregnant, he tells her he wants a divorce and moves in with his mistress, and then later in the show complication happen and his wife and unborn child die and the mistress feels horrible...
I know its not the same but it made me think a lot!
Glad you liked it! I hope carolyn is doing well! She must be getting big!
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I aboslutely love the 5th stanza, oh gosh, it totally got me. Aboslutely beautiful and deep and expressive. Keeps the reader wondering the entire time, feel well written. I loved this.
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The narrative here is excellent-thought provoking indeed! I like how the truth is left ambiguous-are you a stalker or are you a jilted lover? Very sad ending, really packs a punch this one, well penned
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