She goes to the beyond just to please me.
She's kind of loose, but damn, she's sexy.
Nothing about her is fake.
Her personality unique;
Constructed from video games,
And Reality TV.
The way she's competitive,
Over every little thing.
Her sexy 'come hither' look,
And her perfect physique.
She's got me wrapped,
Around her finger.
Some call it whipped,
But I don't mind it.
She's quiet, yet loud;
Self concious, but sure of herself.
She's humble, but proud;
A cross between Heaven and hell.
So much about her is contridicting,
But facinating.
The things she does are odd,
But cute.
I might regret this tomorrow,
But I don't care.
I've been drinking all night,
And the feeling is fading.
We'll go to my place,
I'll put on something soft and romantic,
Or maybe I won't give it the effort.
I won't bother with specifics...
I'm wasted and ready.
Author notes
Loosley inspired by 'Wasted and Ready'- Ben Kweller & 'Short skirt, Long Jacket'- Cake
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that almost sounds like someone i know but i loved every bit of this poem, kind of was liks something you would see in those old independence movies or something, keep it flowing
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Well painted images. Nice story, well told.
Buddy
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This excelent free style. Clear, honest and yet it racks with an underlying emotion the pulls you to the finish. Your talent shines in this. It is very good
Dutchman1950 -
So many of us feel that way, and we want to be treated that way.
This is another great work of yours. Thx for sharing with us!!
Cheers,
-Fernanda Freire
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I applaude you, and...
Your lines telling:
People mustn't have anything "about" them "is fake". "Their personality" ought to be "unique"...
I like them and share the the main theme in you poem with you!
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So vague yet specific. I cannot htink of enough good words to describe this. I hope you are forever producing more poetryas good as this, you describe a person so perfectly and as the raw truth of them.
thanks,
Well done,
Good luck.
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wow you really can describe a person very well... And then yourself as well... you really make it seem like you are ready to have a relationship if not permantely... then for at least one special night. Thanks for sharing this... and thanks for placing this into our Friends reading list.
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Contradictions
You catch the essence of all women in these lines! A good read, strong lines. Nice job!
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Very good write! Great read. Another amazing write from a very talented person! Thanks for sharing!
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Aww I really like this, really edgy and chic! I love it so much, very easy going flow and very "cool" (:
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