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missing

"No!" Screamed the girl,
But no one cared, or listened

She fought hard and tried.


Her parents, just a few feet away,
continued window shopping.
Finally, they stopped looking.
They turned around,
and couldn't find their little girl.
They yelled out her name,
and people turned.

A silence followed

that haunted them.


Everyone's life

was forever changed.

The only thing that remains
is memories of just a few minutes ago -
When she whispered,
"I wish that I could swing or fly away."

 

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Picture prompt credit - http://lafaette.deviantart.com/art/my-small-black-dress-133250694

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  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    August 26

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    Good Gosh

    From the first line I was hooked and just wanted to cry -
    how sad it is that parents don't seem to notice when something like this happens; and your line of

    "Everyone's life
    was forever changed." -- is so damn true. No one understands the consequences til it happens to them Startling and stunning write!

    Congratulations on the HM
    ♥
    Stay safe
    ~Manda


  • Poetic Tasha Moderators member
    August 16

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    excellent write here hun!
    awesome take on the prompt, congrats on the HM

    Tasha


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    August 15

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    Lots of emotion in this one. I think you done well.
    Congrats on the hm.


  • Kathraina silver member
    August 14

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    Oh my!
    The emotions here are so raw, they seep off the page.
    Magnificent take on the prompt! Great imagery and flow throughout this piece
    Bravo and thank you



    ♥ kate


  • Daniela Violin silver member
    August 13

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    This is more a story to me than a poem.

    It needs a little tightening.

    example:

    "No!!" she screamed
    But no one heard
    She fought against gravity
    Feet glued to pavement

    Her parents just a few feet away
    continued window shopping

    They turned around
    And she was gone

    The only thing that remained
    Were remnants of whispers
    Her intent to swing or fly away


    Good luck!


    • Kari gold member
      August 13
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      Thanks for your help with this I'll have to try and play around with it!

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