two days ago the world was ending
I cried till my pillow was drenched
those tears were for you
in fear of losing.
but night turned into day twice
and God answered me
with a head full of doubt
I could hear his voice
disguised as mine.
it will be okay child.
the agony
the sorrow
a wailing song of
black-holed sadness
the echoing of nothing and everything
crashing down --
it will be okay child.
emotions swirling
left me speechless
stuttering
dyslexic to my pain
I mustered "I don't want to break"
and thus it was we were not broken.
my world kept turning
yours kept spinning
each word directed to moon
floating on wind
like a paper airplane love letter
with destination us
our eyes stitched to sky
waiting for a falling star
to wish and dream upon
with thoughts of love
and newly quieted tears
I told you, dear children, it will be okay.
we were just mimicking august rain.
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This caught my interest by the title and I couldn't stop reading it.
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Interesting and beautiful - the imagery swirls around me softly engaging me in with its easy flow
"our eyes stitched to sky
waiting for a falling star
to wish and dream upon ..." --> gorgeous lines; it is a simple thing to want to wish upon a star but in this it breathes so much more than simple
Congratulations on the Spotlight
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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beautiful
I know what you are going through, I went through much the same far too recently, but you had, or indeed have still got the strength i lacked, and a beautiful way of putting thoughts down.
Congratulations on a wonderful write.
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Thank you for that...songs of hope, faith, and the answering of prayers ease the soul so sweetly. Also love your title. It is like a good charm to keep in my heart as let the good enevelop me.
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my world kept turning
yours kept spinning
each word directed to moon
floating on wind
like a paper airplane love letter
with destination us
our eyes stitched to sky
waiting for a falling star
All of this and more....and I say that because the captioned part is where I just died from sheer beauty. There is beauty here love, and the voice of God is just wonderful. I love it, and I think you're wonderful.
Congratulations on your spotlight love,
its the best poem I've read in a long time.
Love,
jin
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Wow, this is amazing! i love the hope throughout the poem with God's little assurances. The way you have expressed the pain and sadness to hopefullness is beautiful
"I told you, dear children, it will be okay.
we were just mimicking august rain"
This is the most touching part! Great work!!
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I could not choose favorite lines in this poem.
I loved it from start to finish.
Congrats on the well deserved spotlight!
Lynda
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I love
this poem the intensity of the feelings the amazing metaphors (the paper plane is wonderful)and the end made me cry 
. Beautifully written 
for sharing your talent.
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A very beautiful poem. I love the phrase "...like a paper airplane love letter with destination us." and the final line "we were just mimicking august rain." Very well written. Congratulations on being spotlighted -- clearly well deserved.
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Daniela, I fell in love with this poem. a woman can see her relationship, every day life with bumps in the road. You put it so much better than I. mm beautiful.
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hi Daniela, I recommended this poem to be spotlighted and it has been accepted. Melee Va
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and thanks for your wonderful comment.
I've never been spotlighted before, do you know when it shows up?
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thanks for this poem - hit just the right spot, I'm going to bookmark it for the bad days - I especially relate to the para "our eyes stitched to sky
waiting for a falling star
to wish and dream upon
with thoughts of love
and newly quieted tears"
love the image of eyes stiched to the sky.
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1. thanks for making one of my poems a favorite of yours. It means a lot.
b. 'dyslexic to my pain'- not sure why this stuck with me but it did.. maybe because it felt like the heart of this inside the it will be ok moment...
true confusion maybe... dunno but I very much so liked this line and how it seemed to be to me the heart of this write so interestingly told.
neat author page too
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This is wonderfully written...beautiful in fact. Creating a whirlwind of emotion, leaving me with a desire to read on and on.
I love the lines where god disguised his voice and yours...and comforted you saying "it will be okay" I wonder how often we listen to voices in disguise?
our eyes stitched to sky
waiting for a falling star
to wish and dream upon
with thoughts of love
and newly quieted tears
I told you, dear children, it will be okay.
we were just mimicking august rain.
This ending left me smiling from ear to ear...this is a spectacular poem and I do thank you for sharing it.
Blessings~
Az
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What a gorgeous poem-"floating on wind" is a lovely phrase, just sums up the whole feel of this poem. It is very gentle and understated-very nicely written
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