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vision unseen.

i had a thought that one day i'd be blessed.
i didn't know it would come true this well,
And upto this point-
i didn't know i'd be sharing.
But when i finally saw you=
The wait was worth the pain,
Cause beauty courses through you
Like a bright light thru a haze.
I can't look away from beauty so simple-
And when i see u plain-
Dam i love that dimple

lust courses through my sheilds and i'm no longer alone.
pain is emptied from me, like a good cry that releases fear.
I can't hold you back from your inevitable gain.
Your just amazing- In all your ways.

♥ i love u baby.

What do I do when I lied to myself about forgetting this person?

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  • tikitonga07
    August 27
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    Aww.. baby girl.. your so sweet to me.. I just wish I deserved it... I love you so much baby! beautiful poem.. as always my love!


  • Deceits Tears silver member
    August 20
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    Lovely words
    Hello again I hope you are well


  • taylorndncar gold member
    August 13

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    "Ah coulda' been ah contender!"

    i hope, you told me to correct your mistakes 'cause that's what i'm gonna do: 1st rule is, rhyming lines have to match in syllables, or the rhyming scheme won't work; 2nd rule is, don't use abbreviations unless you use abbreviations from the
    very start of your effort; 3rd rule is, when you "clip" words like "because", you have to use an apostrophe ' to show the clip is intentional. so because should
    look like this: 'Cause. you have a good idea, you just have to correct your mistakes. a good idea is to read your effort aloud, the rough spots will show up.


  • Papers
    August 13
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    Very nice and filled with passion. Keep up the great work, chica!


  • xxvampyregirlxx
    August 13
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    omg ashlee i love it ^-^

  • well you just told me this was for me.. its lovely. I love you!

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