The roaring flame danced in the wind
The two unsuspecting lovers met eachothers gaze
Hand in hand the dumstruck fools did not notice
The Pheonix arose from the passionate flame
They lay on the deck of his ship,
Buring the sweet oils of the night,
Gazing at the stars,
Exchanging aluring glances over a bottle of wine
The pheonix's beautiful cry of sweet lament permiated the air
Nobody would have guessed
What was to come
Clouds gathered above their heads
The hurt and fooled cry out in anger and despair
Quietly at first easily ignored...
Then the rain came
The watery bullets hit them from the skys,
And so came the quake
The electric curses sent from the heavens.
The now bloodstained lovers fled
Taking there own path
From the pheonix's perfectally woven eye
Droped a tear of pearl
And what of the flame?
.......Extinguished [or so it would seem]
The pheonix in all its speldor and beauty
Moved no more
There was
Calm after the storm
From the ashes blossomed the same magestic glamour
The flame was alight
The last burning embor still remained
Of what was...
And what now is
And so yet again
The bird spread its wings
And took flight
It will never be the same
For now it dwells, constricted in memory
And all it is now
And all it will ever be
Is a suvoneir left on the mantle peace
That we all gaze upon with fondness comforting our souls
The glimer of its eyes is all that remains of
A simpler time...
Reader tell me,
how could she love him now?
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i love the imagery in this peice. its truely a great write.
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You are amazing!
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Its really great hun.
I do see the reasoning to something is missing but i think simplicity is much better than over doing it.
Your a really good writer keep it up. ^^
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Full of emotion and imagination.I agree with the comments below, still this is a great flowing poem and detailed all the way through. I hope you're okays anyway. I loved this poem very powerfull yet so simple! Good job Em.
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Good, full of imagery...great =].
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It's a good poem, good topic, but there's something that's missing from it. But it was an interesting read.
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I know exactally what you mean it dosnt feel complete to me I feel like there is so much more that needs to be expressed here.
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Oooh, wow! A heartfelt write, full of powerful imagery... speechless, good one!! Olivia x
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Thankyou although I think it needs editing though x
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really?? how come? Oh, what was the inspiration?
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oh and the reason why. I feel like I have so much more to express in this peace and to me it dosn't feel finished
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....perhaps you should read my newest journal entry it may be clearer then. How are you? its been ages! x
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