I entered the room,
more quietly, I’m sure,
than you’d ever heard before
Leaving behind
mother and daughter
just to see your face
Taxied my way across the ol’ town,
over the bridge, into memory lane and
like a gentleman, you paid
But the evening fare
cost much more
than you or I
had prepared for
An ol’ town, ol’ friends and a basement
that lingered of ol’ liquor and
distilled fucks
So I sat, cross-legged
wrapped around so tight
as if to hide my every strand of DNA
The very existence, you say,
that has kept you going
all of these years
And although we were over-grown babies
the last time we talked and touched
and fucked
I felt more like a woman
than ever before
in your amrs
Maybe it was the pregnant sky
on that Fourth of July
or maybe it was the Adultry
taking place in the panic of night
As all the boys reminisced
about how good I used to be;
half-naked and completly insane
To the left and to the right
they'd giggle then sigh
But you boy, in the middle-
eyes beady and blue,
spoke of truth,
of heartache
and denial
You said I could never love
and that's what you loved about me most.
Author notes
"and he laughs,
it is a child's laugh, an idiot's laugh,
laughing at nothing,
the only laugh that understands"
- from poem 'the snow of Italy' by Charles Bukowski
Comments
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Wonderful and so Bukowski-like! I read this twice just for the thrill of it. Loved the last lines. This is so grand as written from the prompt. I wish you well in the contest.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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Distilled fucks lmao.... very original and vivid.
This piece is amazing. Candid, honest, sexy, raw. In other words, just how I like it.
Love your phrasing.
panic of night... half naked and completely insane. Those are perfect.
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Oh this was just freaking fantastic, I must say. I loved the descriptions and the metaphors you used. How creative and original. I loved the line about a pregnant sky.
Wonderful ending. Good luck, I hope you do well.
I will have to read some more.
P.s. I have a freeverse contest, would love to see what you could bring to the table.
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