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A talk with the dead

Empty is the mind
that finds

itself in the perpetual state
of rewind

the grind
of holding on

and not letting go

puts one's life in the cyclic bind

of lost and find.

A contest entry

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  • Desire gold member
    August 18

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    Thank You!

    Thank You for Your entry: A talk with the dead
    This piece tugged hard at Spirit and after reading several times ~
    I'm Honored also Humbled You took the time to pen for my contest
    You took the prompt and brought forth much for the Mind to feast upon~
    Bravo!! When I digest words written, images come through that grab hard~
    Woven Strengths: Adore the rhyme and while I was reading, I kept getting
    this image of two hands pulling something in opposite directions~
    I kept being shown reference to a disconnect for some reason
    I'm shown two different variants- one extreme where the person cannot move
    on - not saying a need to forget but unable to to let go of anything the person
    once owned who is now deceased...unable to function in the real world-
    depressed and down to the point of lifelessness- just going throught the motions
    where as the other view - the person remembers the good times also the moments
    where tears fall...missing the physical aspect of the connection however can embrace what is there...not trying to hold on for dear Life what once was in a physical sense
    However that is to be Interpreted...
    You give the Reader much to think about
    Love the direction You took with this prompt
    Hopefully my comment to Your write makes sense
    Powerful verse and message You have brought forth

    These words grabbed and pulled~
    the grind
    of holding on

    and not letting go
    Vivid Imagery poured in these lines...

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent also Voice
    also best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    Many blessings too
    with much love and light~ Desire~*~


  • Denerica silver member
    August 13

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    Wow, trying to get back what we can't have back when it is permanant such as the death of a close loved one. Well done. Blessings.


    • Dark Otter
      August 19
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      Thank you for kind comment and HM

      Your crtitique was both uplifting and insightful. I thank you for both the recognition and the HM. I enjoyed participating.


  • darkyinsoul
    August 13

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    Sounds close to the brink
    reminissing
    Glad to see a write from you my friend
    well penned!!
    Thanks for the share
    Darky