Behind the vacant masks of time
Sentiments and I chant a tune
As bonding became a lover’s chime.
Insecurities shaping an evil crime
Hastily callous as a deserts dune
Behind the vacant masks of time.
The cliffs were severe to climb
Uniting as one under the moon
As bonding became a lover’s chime.
In the depths of the souls sublime
Elation lashing the current swoon
Behind the vacant masks of time.
A journey weaving our inner prime
Laughter and tears a monsoon
As bonding became a lover’s chime.
Concluding in concert for a lifetime
Symphony of harps, parading rhyme
Behind the vacant masks of time
As bonding became a lover’s chime.
© August 12, 2009
Author notes
Pic: http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/84974870/
Prompt: Married To Emotions
Villanelle
A Villanelle is a nineteen-line poem consisting of a very specific rhyming
scheme: aba aba aba aba aba abaa. The first and the third lines in the
first stanza are repeated in alternating order throughout the poem, and
appear together in the last couplet (last two lines).
In a list
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A contest entry
- Poetry Formed XLX - by Bear by Arkbear.
850 points, ended September 3, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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oohh I like the repeiveness off this .. like its a song and that picture is very niceeeee
Great rhyme scheme going on there!! x
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thank you, hun, appreciate your words.
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Hello
There is no Meter specified here....but this L here makes me stumblea tad..>
The cliffs were severe to climb
Your METS are strong and leaves me pondering -
Your last few L's are the bomb....you hit a homerun with this Form......the ONLY thing I would suggest with this Form....is to Left-align it for bettter Flow....IMHO -
Lovely job for sure....good luck & blessings to you and your entry,
Bear -
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I will remember all that. Thanks, Bear.
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This is a really beautiful poem. I like especially the length of the lines, not short, not long...just the right tempo to bind this villanelle together as a whole. Good luck in the contest.
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Thank you, Steve. I appreciate your wonderfully kind comments.
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This is a STUNNING villanelle!
I've been reading up on this form for the past few days. I really love the effect that the repetition has. It creates a rhythm to it that keeps me wanting more. I've read several villanelles in the past few days in a book I checked out from the library.
I love how this poem focuses so perfectly on four of the five senses, especially the sense of sight and hearing. 
Deviantart.com has some gorgeous work that inspires such amazing poetry. 
Don
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thank you, don. I never thought of it focusing on the senses. everyone sees things diiferently which I think is great.
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mask of time and blooming of love!
As bonding became a lover’s chime." so nice is this line.poem is just a brooke of honey flowing on the green love.Thank you sweet Cris
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thank you for your wonderful words.
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This is so very beautiful, kinda like liquid honey on warm toast
Excellent read
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thank you, hun, it's been a while since I have written this type of poetry. hope I have done some justice to the form.
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Wow reading this it was so peaceful and had a romantic calm. Wow this is so beautiful I am at a total loss of words. Thank you for sharing. I really enjoyed this.
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thank you, I am very humbled by your kind and generous words.
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