The sons of the Gods are courageous in their quest.
Fruit born from Poseidon and Amphitrite’s vine.
Duty bound nobility at their father's behest.
Perilous their adventures to quell evils unrest.
They crush the Hades seed of fruit into their wine.
The sons of the Gods are courageous in their quest.
Their conch-shell trumpets drive evil from their nest.
Foes flee before the righteous and music of the divine.
Duty bound nobility at their father's behest.
The mermaids and dolphins know Gods have blessed.
The oceans tempest with peace and calm by design.
The sons of the Gods are courageous in their quest.
Guardians of the seven seas, they always do their best.
Proven warriors of metal with iron in their spine.
Duty bound nobility at their father's behest.
Tritons are the father's sons, lineage won’t protest.
Their softer side, a mother's blood, peace does entwine.
The sons of the Gods are courageous in their quest.
Duty bound nobility at their father's behest.
Author notes
The prompt is a poem by cricketjeff called the "The Tridents of the Tritons", found here:
http://allpoetry.com/poem/4445387
We are looking for villanelles which either reply to his poem or are written as a takeoff on his poem.
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Thank-you for a good strong villanelle, well connected to the prompt. It's not an easy form, balancing two lines that must each be used four times is never easy and finding the rhymes for them can be a right royal pain!
For a second villanelle this is a great effort
Jeff
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Well written
The courage of the sons of God remind me of the adventure of the 6 prophet in the African mythodology.
Nice effort.
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Not bad ...
and I certainly appreciate the large print. Much easier to read. My only real problem with this is in the lines "do their father's behest". (I'd say "Duty bound nobility acting at their father's behest" -- or you could leave at their if the meter seems off to you). Otherwise, good job here.
All in all, good job.
Thanks for entering.
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Wow. Wow. That was amazing. You did a fantastic job on this villanelle.
Stunning. Best of luck in the contest!
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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Thank you for your positive comment. This is only my second attempt at writing a Villanelle.
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