As I scribbled across the pages of my soul
Looking back at times when satan was my best friend
Amidst the tornado of inquity you walked in,making me whole
In those times the blue blood of transgression was in control
I wrote down the stories of sin which had no end
As I scribbled across the pages of my soul
On the ebony white paper my fiery past burnt a hole
I couldn't write any further ashamed at my past that I couldn’t amend
Amidst the tornado of inquity you walked in making me whole
The pages of my heart were blackened as coal
On human relationships I could not depend
As I scribbled across the pages of my soul
Wiping away my tears you embraced me in your arms to console
And said "The broken ends of your life,I will mend"
Amidst the tornado of inquity you walked in,making me whole
And thus you became my personal diary and my only goal
From then in my life,beautiful stories are all that I have penned
As I scribbled across the pages of my soul
Amidst the tornado of inquity,you walked in,making me whole
13th "August" 2009
© 2006-2009 Rinzu Susan Rajan
Author notes
VILLANELLE
It is 19 lines long, but only uses two rhymes, while also repeating two lines throughout the poem.
The first five stanzas are triplets,and the last stanza is a quatrain such that the rhyme scheme is as follows:
"aba aba aba aba aba abaa."
The tricky part is that the 1st and 3rd lines from the first stanza are alternately repeated such that the 1st line becomes the last line in the second stanza, and the 3rd line becomes the last line in the third stanza.
The last two lines of the poem are lines 1 and 3 respectively, making a rhymed couplet.
r i n z u r a j a n
A contest entry
- my personal diary... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
400 points, ended August 22, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Your spiritual journey to God grace. (open to prewrites) by Starswhispers.
800 points, ended August 18, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - HEROES AND HEROINES-poems needed for ecumenical event at Anglican venue. by Vera Rich.
700 points, ended October 22, 26 entries
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Great Poem
This is an excellently written poem. I like the style, i.e. rhyming the second line in every verse. I have actually never seen a poem written in this form with such precision. The poem is both soul searching and inspirational. It reminds us that nothing in life is set in stone and that where ever we are in life, whatever we are doing, we have the power and inner strength to change. I give it five stars!!
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Wow. This is very powerful. I love the 3rd stanza especially. Wonderful write; you have come such a long way since your 1st write on this site, so congratulations on that!
Thank you fro entering, and good luck
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The storm between good and evil are portrayed here in your life, and I appreciate your transparency...It has a lyrical rhythm to it..Also I most like the voice of God saying "The broken ends of your life I will mend"...He is so restorative in His nature which gives such hope and promise...This is the first of all your poems I have read and I am encouraged with your spiritual depth, and I will be reading more....Congratulations on your bronze trophy!
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Nicely penned you have a lovely rythm floating along this piece, you have very good metaphors as well an uplifting poem with a certainty of the Lord love at the end. Well done.
Thank you for entering my contest.
God bless.
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Such Beauty
I love your story and tranformation!
I bet you felt relieved when all the negative in the beginning turned over to such a positive ending!
Good Luck!
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I value your touching words, they express the darkenss a time lived, but as time currently lasts only a day. As you reflect upon such sins or choices maybe you wish you didn't make there is light felt between them, a hope for all to share. Your write conveys struggle, maybe trying again, which is all any of us can do.
A humble write you have penned, but also a great acknowledgement of "HIM".
Well done poet.
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Ah..very thoughtful description of your muse and your spirit makes this post a wonderfudl entry in contest..thank you so much for this piece...
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