cold
Floating through the water
Moving swiftly and efficiently
L e g f r s
i t n n o t e t
s i r a
Beady eyes, cold and piercing.
The crocodile, waits...
Author notes
This is my first shape poem. I hope you like it!
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What can I improve on? What parts do you like most?
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it took me a few seconds to figure out, but that is very cute! I enjoyed the challenge. It gives a great image and it is so true. Very witty! Thank you for sharing!
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Excellent!!!
a lovely poem!cleverly written, it's an joy to read. thank you for sharing this delight with your fabulous talent. keep writing poet! God bless you always
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I like it! Very cleverly written! It took me a second longer to read the shaped bit, but that's fine! The poem itself is very good! I love it!
Well Done and Keep Writing!
-Crystal
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yeah i agree took me a minute to read it. I think you have a lot of talent and you were wise with your words....much <3....scars.
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I don't like it, I LOVE it! Took me an extra minute to read the shape part, but it did remind me of the bits and pieces you see of a croc above water. The last line gave me goosebumps!
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