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Over Watering.




over watering
the garden--
Spring tide  





Andrew Hide
30~03~2004

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Written March 30th, 2004

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  • macandrew
    August 28, 2005
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    I enjoyed this one. The idea of a manmade tide rolling into my garden brought a smile to my face.

    Thanks
    John


  • Lurie
    December 13, 2004
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    Very nice work!!!! Your KU's are always wonderful Andrew!!! ~Laura


  • myron silver member
    August 21, 2004
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    vivid

    enjoyed this heaps andrew - good work....

  • Pari Ali
    July 20, 2004
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    lucky you my pages would be overflowing with nature poems if I lived so close to it.


  • haikumonk gold member
    May 2, 2004
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    Clever one Andrew.... nice work.

    Don


  • Ava Noire silver member
    March 31, 2004
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    This made me smile. This is really fantastic Andrew. So much stated in so few words....That's skill!


  • BillS2
    March 31, 2004
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    Very Good

    Hi Andrew:
    This makes for a really good write. I had to read it over twice as I didn't pickup on the meaning the first time I read it. Thank you for a really good write. Bill


  • Kitesen
    March 30, 2004
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    Beautifull wordplay. Hopefull it is welcome to the plants too in this time of the year. It is clear sparkling view. I hope it doesn't flush the goldfish.

  • Essence13
    March 30, 2004
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    Very cool and unique. Its almost like a nonet...well sortta. Great write, keep up the good work!!


  • March 30, 2004
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    i have no garden
    but the earth where i tread so
    softly with my dreams.



  • SusanL
    March 30, 2004
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    Nice... i see the effects of spring runoff here... the garden a bit too close to the stream....Susan


  • Madison Attitude
    March 30, 2004
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    overflowing bliss

    Andrew, I like this, the fact that you've chosen to go with 5-3-2 is interesting. I like it! I've tried haiku but not sure I'm a good haiku poetess. You've done a great job here, I can see the water overflowing ... Much love, Aimee xo Rock on...

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