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In The End

Silver sky
Sprinkle star
Clearing mist
To see so far.

A prophet stands beside a stone
The world's blood runs cold
Bathed in eerie light.

With death comes life
With day comes night
In the end things are right

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  • reveller silver member
    August 31

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    it sent a chill

    not in a bad way - I really like this poem. It made me feel curious - I wanted there to be more.......always good to leave people wanting more


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    August 16

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    Usually in the end, things do turn out right. Whether that is the circumstance changes, or our mindset. Felt that eerieness in this.


  • lowbrass
    August 13

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    Pretty good

    I really like the style with the sane nonsensicality (thats right I make my own words).
    The first two lines of the last stanza don't really make sense perhaps you could take out the with or change brings to comes? I don't know if that would have the meaning that you want but I think it would.