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Pain

sequestered in the valley of death,

her mind does flow,

listed in the clear blue waters

nothing will ever grow in her mind.

 

hate of who she is,

distaste for the world around her,

darkness swells in her breast,

love has not found  the humble being that she is.

 

twisted in the ebony nights,

crying for all to see,

something breaks inside,

and now won't let her be.

 

pain unfolds in a way that was unknown,

time folds inward to hold itself is oblivion,

mindless of the world around

she cries out in pain.

 

love came to her once 

now is gone,

happiness bloomed in her once,

now it too is gone.

 

she cries out to the space beyond

"this is the last day,

tomorrow I will be no more"

and so here shuts the empty door.

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  • Poetic Heart
    November 28
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    This was a very deep poem, i loved it a lot! i think it sounds great and goes together good!


  • Palas Kumar Ray
    November 23
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    I can relate to this poem so much!More accurate it becomes if I tell that you have drawn a very true picture of pain to which many can instanly relate be it a he or a she.


  • no more name
    August 16

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    This is an excellent poem...I feel the pain she endures and the imagery of the description wow. I really enjoyed this write and look forward to reading more of your stuff.

  • hate of who she is,
    distaste for the world around her,
    darkness swells in her breast,
    love has not found the humble being that she is.


    Wow, really feel the pain in this. Great write, thanks for sharing.


  • trekkergirl
    August 15

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    Hmmm I thought I had read and commented on this one... good thing I went back to check if I had missed any of them... cuz I would have been missing one very well written poem.

    This poem is so very full of good imagery and emotions. I also liked your background. Very interesting. Thanks for sharing this with us.

  • aww sad but a good poem....
    'twisted in the ebony nights,
    crying for all to see,
    something breaks inside,
    and now won't let her be.' i can relate to those lines alot...thanks for the entry and good luck!


  • Wynd Arc
    August 12

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    Lots of feelings flowing throughout the words of this mighty piece of work. Seeing how the woman feels helps me understand that her emotions are strong. Darkness entraps her. Great write

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