What's it like to have a cold heart
having no natural affection at all
besides that of self-interest?
Someone having no natural affection
is a person who would speak scornfully
of the kindness and goodness of another
and always looks for falseness in the other,
proclaiming that no one could ever be capable
of having a good and decent conscience.
What is it like for you
who live this pitiful life?
I'm so sorry for you.
What did you think
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Leave it to the poetic heart to take a good concept and tear it apart. While I wouldn't go so far as to say that this offering bad, I can say that it contains little of the specific pessimist. Your writing here is a scientific dissection conducted in the abstract. I guess there is no reason not to give you kudos for that, but I find the writing here to be far too on the nose for my personal tastes.
But, if I set subjectivity aside, I think I can conclude that, objectively, you make a solid point that I can only imagine is inspired by over-exposure to those saying it can't be done.
~Das
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