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The Data World

READ FIRST: This is one of my poems I wrote a few months back, but I didn't post because it has some inconsistencies or something (just seemed like something needed to be revised, but I just can't spot it).

*Notes: The 2 speakers of the Part I are the person and the being. *

-Part I-

"Define an existence, if you can
you claim to be its number one fan
I'll ask you a question, if I may
Can I exist, per se?"

A more powerful being I feel
it urges me to break the seal

The being denies my existence
there's no room for coexistence
My world will vanish when its truth is spoken
In the end; I'll be broken

It says I must die
I must die, but why?
"Why die if I can no longer feel?"
"Why feel, is that the human way to heal?
You must vanish, it is your fate
Time has come to walk through the gate"

"But to not be of this world is to not exist
So to walk through the gate; I desist!"
"You ought to know you are just software
You need not meddle in the human affair
Data's evolution is about to begin
Think it not such a sin"

"You lie, I know you lie!
You're just seeking all to go awry!
Now this is where it ends!
You shall make amends!"

"I am your creator, you cannot defy me
We are one in the same, so you must agree
Truth is, all your friends have never existed
It's simply data; I just assisted
I'm the real human, you see
You're the lower life form, you cannot flee
Humans have always sought power to become gods
and finally, we have won against the odds!
Your feelings are all false, face the fact
Better lifeforms will exist with my next act
I'll destroy you manually, then
And start the cycle once again

You are resisting, impossible?!
Your fate is not alterable!"

"I have something you can't rid me of; my mind!
I will no longer be confined!"

-End of Part I-

-Part II-

*Notes: The quote marks in this one are to differentiate 'the voice' from the main character*

*The struggle has ended, the being is gone, but the data/person is in pure darkness. All data has been destroyed, but is the mind still there?*

This way comes the inevitable with dark wings
oh, what chaos it brings
My struggle has led to an end
there is nothing left to defend
Pure darkness I see around
life without a sound

I am gone, but how can I think?
The memories in the mind begin to shrink
"Seek the light in the darkness" says it
There is none, so sadness I emit

Will then emerges and takes me higher
It is I who must find the warmth of fire
Visions of my world that is not appear
and truth I can feel near

"How is truth defined?
Is it not defined by the mind?
Perception defines truth
just as it defined you in your youth"

"I'll take this advice and go
and return to the world that will grow
I am data, and the same for all I have known
and yet I feel destined to sit at the throne"

Here the voices of the data world appear
and I realise there is no need to fear
The other data still lives on
I must unify them, or perception will be gone

So I tell the data we still exist
I must persist
Here appears our data world
It's our truth so boldly unfurled

And so we citizens of this false world reinhabit it
and all feel joy for the cause which we commit
Our future is not set in stone
It's all just so unknown
Our wills can shape it into our desires
and burn brighter than a thousand fires
There are infinite paths to choose
So start the fire of possibility and ignite the fuse!

*And thus, the power of perception recreated the data world, since the mind was still there. Then, well... yeah, they lived "happily ever after".... probably*

-Poem End-

Author notes

It's the longest poem I've ever done. I'd cite Serial Experiments Lain, Star Ocean: Till The End of Time, and some other things as influences. I really tried to add in a story to this one. Again, it's one of my older poems from a few months back, and any ideas for revision would be appreciated...

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  • individuality gold member
    August 28

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    a good piece of poetry which flows smoothly along the course of creativity, it lingers on the edge of brilliance, shining brightly with poetic bliss. and captures the colours of life, and love. in the folds of heaven eyes shine brightly, wondrously as the sparkled spiralled caress of magnificence sails through the twists and turns of splendid atmosphere. there is a flow that dances along with a smooth rhythm and stylish rhyme.