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I hate coming up with titles..

You grin. I melt.
Your rough grip as you pull me in is enough to make me hot,
but it's the look in your eyes that makes me giddy.

You’re gone. I’m here.
Never too far away but your time, it's parceled out.
Valuable, in demand, not to be squandered.

You yank. I come running.
My leash while you're gone is the phone,
so much so that it's actually exhilarating to go without it for a day.

You and me.  Creatures of need.
Clinging on to something familiar, battered but getting better.
Or so we pretend, ignoring the band-aided bullet holes in our chests.

You whisper. I shine.
You speak soft, low; my emptiness feels different somehow.
I hold tight, try to drink in the feeling before you leave with it.

You work. I play.
Suddenly you're quiet, reserved. But nothing's wrong,
you tell me this as I feel you holding back.

You withdraw. I follow.
You play the wounded soul card. I salve you with pretty words,
while inside I roll my eyes and ache for a less fabricated exchange.

You need me. I need something different.
But not all the time. I need you, too...
but I want to see a different need from you.

You need me. I need something different. He needs me too.
But not all the time. I need you; I need something different, too...
You need my affection, my reassurance, you crave intense commitment.
He needs only to have fun, to get naked and feel skin against skin. So do I.

You withdraw. I follow. He keeps it light.
You play the wounded soul card. I salve you with pretty words,
while inside I roll my eyes and ache for his less fabricated conversation.
He flirts, makes me feel alive and just a little wild. Thrills something in me.

You work. I play. He wants to play too.
Suddenly you're quiet, reserved. But nothing's wrong,
you tell me this as I feel you holding back. Funny, he's saying something similar.
But of course he's speaking of my potential guilt; you're simply guilt tripping me.

You whisper. I shine. He is ignored.
You speak soft, low; my emptiness feels different somehow.
I hold tight, try to drink in the feeling before you leave with it.
I love this in you. He can't compete with this, knows it, and waits his turn.

You and me. Creatures of need. His needs are different.
We’re clinging onto something familiar, battered but getting better.
Or so we pretend, ignoring the band-aided bullet holes in our chests.
He does not cling; has his own wounds and deals with them. He leaves me to mine.

You yank. I come running. He cracks jokes.
My leash while you're gone is the phone,
so much so that it's actually exhilarating to go without for a day.
He demands no leash, no commitment. He and I are separate and free, simple and pure.

You’re gone. I’m here. He’s just down the road.
Never too far away but your time, it's parceled out.
Valuable, in demand, not to be squandered. He has his day off,
and a house just down the block. It’s even empty- his girl's busy too.

You grin. I melt. He’ll be around.
Your rough grip as you pull me in is enough to make me hot,
but it's the look in your eyes that makes me giddy. This doesn't happen enough,
the passion without a care or a worry, just enjoying each other. And... he'll be around.

Author notes

so... every time i post something, i inevitably get comments clamoring for capitalization to make the piece look finished. since i used pretty extensive punctuation in this one, i went for it. happy now?

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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Comments


  • Concrete Angel silver member
    August 12

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    Surprisingly I liked this. I say "surprisingly" because as I read I was wondering if I was going to like it, especially when it got into the stanzas with the other man as well because I'm one that's big on fidelity and think if you're not feeling the same toward someone you should break it off before going through the motions that this poem plays out. Anyway, what I'm getting at is though I don't agree with the story of this poem, it's well written and the repetition through out the stanzas actually adds to the effect and the feelings that you convey in this piece. Good write, well done

    Oh yes, and if you decide to try to come up with a title I think it would work to look to the first line of each stanza, know what I mean? SOmething like, "You for Him" I dunno it was just a thought I had lol.


  • Oh.My.Juliet
    August 12
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    I love the beginning of each stanza, it really fits in and the theme is lovely.

    Thanks for sharing! Have a good day (:

    x

  • Oh.My.Juliet
    August 11

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    I reallllyy Iove how you started each stanza out, it was beautiful and really connected the poem together. I really like this, thanks for sharing!

    x


  • Gothmo666
    August 11

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    congrats on the use of capitals!!
    it's nice
    "You and me. Creatures of need. His needs are different.
    We’re clinging onto something familiar, battered but getting better.
    Or so we pretend, ignoring the band-aided bullet holes in our chests.
    He does not cling; has his own wounds and deals with them. He leaves me to mine."
    this is my favourite part in the poem

    Keep writting
    Shaz