the disarming smile of steel-eyed death
as deception becomes the scene
when banshees swarm to feed on sweat
perceptions become the dream
the heart regrets, but the skin embraces
a silent observer waits in vain
the soul forgets and then re-traces
impervious to pain
what once was truth will feed the ground
a whole new set of rules
because sonic booms can't hear a sound
and the choice is what you choose
a blushing brilliance is what you are
indeed you are devine
yes, you are made of shooting stars
and in your eyes they shine
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how beautifull this is such an amazing write in life we do not see the true beauty in everything or the danger and underlying fears this poem gives us a perfect example of that well done my friend this is another amazing write
lots of love alison xx
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ohhh way nice sweet as a cherrie pie and just wowish
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You deal with emotions very well..descriptive..compelling.One has to read this more than once, which is a good thing in poetry..Great job...I enjoyed it
John
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so it seems the master is on top form once more.
this is excellent,
the soul forgets and then retraces
impervious to pain
what a stunning line...this is beautiful,Im probably gonna have to re read over and again to fully grasp, but you did good here....I do mean that btw
so i came back for another read intending to edit and add, but damn i deleted instead so well sorry i put the old stuff back, dam spent too long under canvas with small kids n a grump, anyhow,what i wanted to say is that on second read the tightness of this piece is mindblowing, it never wavers, never looses thread, and it has the rawness somehow of your very earliest writes, the ones that first grabbed me, with that stirring quality, sort od unnerving in a good way. Infact theyre even more unnerving now as I can grasp em a little.the last verse also i just wanted to say its excellent, completely
i love this, big time, you poet are just so talented
catch a hug or several as your the poet master lol
T
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