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Sun Birth

Seven gods
      hammer thunder from above...

Six demons
      nail bone from below...

Five spirits
      reflect the world's horizon...

In eighteen beats
        in your heart a new sun unlaces heat .

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  • Asdzaa Nadleehe
    August 26, 2009

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    ooh, my sweet Muse this is excellent...
    I adore these elements and the imagery you have created ...
    beautiul..
    Many blessings

    and hello~ smiles

    Asdzaa~


    • DayDreamMuse
      August 26, 2009
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      HELLO and Thank you.
      I am soooo glad you enjoyed it.
      Drop a line, say how you been and such.


  • PoetrySmiles
    August 11, 2009

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    Thank you! Something original, creative and genuine. I really, really, really enjoyed reading this. There is something to be said about a poem that speaks volumes in only eight lines. Thanks for the refreshment :-), and very, very well done!


    • DayDreamMuse
      August 12, 2009
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      Thank you. This is my new poetic brand so to say and keeps the theme to a spiritual and elemental level, while at the same time weaves in some mythology. It's more of a feeling rather than a clear intent hidden behind the lines, so it's free to speak to different people in different ways. Glad you enjoyed it.