I’ve just dreamt about you again
Funny-how you don’t cause me any pain
My dreams are the access to you
Otherwise I just can’t reach you
In dreams you are so near
Still, I wake up full of fear
Realizing you are too far away
Wondering how to make you stay
If I could just embrace
My time with you
Tell you in your face
How much I want you
So priceless, all this time with you
So priceless, we both are well
So priceless, all my songs to you
So priceless, I can’t even tell
What did you think about the poem in general?
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It's written in a happy, carefree way. but all I could think of was sadness, relating.
My single suggestion is the rhyme scheme, it's AABB for the first two stanzas and ABAB for the second two. It confused me reading it, it almost seems as if the poem is split when the rhyme scheme changes. I know this is very hard to fix, but I think it would help the poem
great language though,
the last stanza is "priceless"
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