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Making love in buttermilk

Making love in buttermilk

Breasts heave and
Undulate.
Tenderly, lovingly we
Touch
Each other.
Reveling in your arms
Making love in buttermilk
Inching my way over dripping flesh
Licking every last drop
Kinked in feverous climax



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  • Emmyb gold member
    August 17, 2009
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    kinky and fun this is great.


  • alpPDCjr12
    August 12, 2009
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    This made me hungry for two things...one is buttermilk pancakes...hehehe. nice job


    • -Ang-
      August 13, 2009
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      lol yeah well then i guess i did something right

      thanks for stopping by and reading

      ang

  • mallaw
    August 12, 2009
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    Fun

    This poem reads really well. Congrats. The hardest part of poetry, well done here!

    • -Ang-
      August 13, 2009
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      thank you for your comment its greatly appreaciated

      ang


  • Rick Weston silver member
    August 12, 2009

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    buttermilk??? just checked the kitchen, but no luck - bummer. with that image in mind to start, you do well building an intimate sensual scene. nice work.


    • -Ang-
      August 13, 2009
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      thank you so much, i do so love writing erotica it seems to come naturally to me

      ang

  • mhwillingham
    August 12, 2009

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    I like the way you made your words fall into place on the page. Your verses (especially lines 4-6) are absolutely wonderful in the way they catch your eye and force you to read on while at the same time they trickle down the page and actually seduce the reader into imagining exactly what you're describing. I believe you achieved your goal.


    • -Ang-
      August 13, 2009
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      thank you so very much for your awesome comment. all i have to be careful of now is the swelling head

      thanks again

      ang


  • Its-a-mystery gold member
    August 12, 2009
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    Interesting and by the way I never thought of making love in buttermilk lol...
    Nicely written.


    • -Ang-
      August 13, 2009
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      giggles, neither did i until i came accross this contest.

      thanks for reading and commenting

      ang


  • Eric A Marsh.
    August 12, 2009

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    wow

    this is superb..absolutely friggin wonderful you wrap up eroticism with words that would not offend a child............. a great achievement in so few words....as we hippy's said in the 60s this "blows me way"......keep groovin....keep well....


  • Oh.My.Juliet
    August 12, 2009

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    Very interesting concept, sounds like fun XD
    Haha, well written and very sensual

    Thanks for sharing, have a good day!

    x

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