jupiter,
symbiosis is a chaos
first, i won't mistake you for someone with flesh and bones. you are someone
who may be within the two of my inner eyes.
people feed off of other people. there is hunger and the hungry is also starving blind.
i have tried to peer through the eyes of others.
the tinted glares of misery
spoke to my drooling poetry. we both know how thoughts work--
it's like a whirlwind of musical letters.
i wake my eyes every morning to get stuck in traffic jams- the world walks slowly in dimmer paces. the red of the lake, beside the arm of the bridge- the womb of my taxi- curve the face of the drowsy sky. people walk in symmetry and the solitary waterskeeters move with the rhythm of the shuffling songs i hear and only then the world becomes a whirlwind. i can't decide the tune in the morning. the songs become a loud blur. we move a step in longer minutes, and the people (strolling by) look the same. they think too.
i can't happy the songs or hold on to the feathers of nightingales to transport myself in a world where i don't belong.
people here breathe in cancer. i chew luxury and dine with gluttony-- people by the river lose their graves.
why do we need to transport ourselves into songs to only make us forget- happiness is forgetfulness. isn't death the same?
symbiosis is a chaos
maybe.
i don't know where i am going. but i know i am not leaving
this place
till the end.
esha.
Author notes
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A contest entry
- iris (letter contest) by adsaige.
400 points, ended December 3, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, • Add to finalists list, or remove from contest - Introspection: a series-- auditions by unraveled.
700 points, ended August 25, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
writing is a therapy. i am not a writer. i am a liar and a flesh eating monster.
Comments
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MHO is this is wonderful. I like the way you try to look through another's eyes. You accomplished your wish.Wonderful write
Sharon
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this is amazing! your questions really have me, as the reader, thinking. I love it. I love it. I love it!!!
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i like the freedon expressed in this piece. the freedon of the mind and the thoughts...excellent.
always a pleasure to travel deep in your mind.
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"why do we need to transport ourselves into songs to only make us forget- happiness is forgetfulness. isn't death the same?"
Holy cow that was brilliant. I love your writing style. -
to read this slowly and devour every line, every sentiment is to truly peer through the eyes of another. and for them to be your eyes is just... miraculous. hmmm, from the title to the insights to the humble confusion this is just something to savored. thank you for being
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Wow !
Awesome write Tania
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have you
always been a flesh eating monster?
also... yes.
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yes
thanks my friend... read again... i made changes.
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"people walk in symmetry and the solitary waterskeeters move with the rhythm of the shuffling songs i hear and only then the world becomes a whirlwind." I don't know what a waterskeeter is, but I love that line.
And of course, my dear, you are welcome to join Introspection; my vote is yes.
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that's an insect and thanks... i made a few changes... because the things that were changed were really typos and not my complex imagery...lol... i hate lying too much!
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i love the drowsy sky...such a creative and beautiful letter/poem. i love so many parts of this..but this one really is so beautiful:
"you are someone
who may be within the two of my inner eyes."
love it.
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"the red of the lake, beside the arm of the bridge which womb my taxi, curve the face of the drowsy sky. people walk in symmetry and the solitary waterskeeters move with the rhythm of the shuffling songs i hear and only then the world become a whirlwind"
fuck. this was brilliant. very insightful, you are.
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WOW! this was so deep.
"how thoughts work--
it's like a whirlwind of musical letters."
^^
filled with amazing imagery, lovely metaphors, raw emotions. this one right here, is a winner, esha! you are a star!!!!
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i love you too!
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Good luck!
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yay! i cannot wait.
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done
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