Song for the sacred
A rumble echoes from the bowels of the cave,
To three marble eggs she is enslaved.
This mythical creature, the last of her kind,
Guarding her young from the plight of mankind.
Crimson flares light the night sky
Wings spread in a dance up high.
Eternal mates caught in a lover's dive,
Preserving their species is their strife.
This magnificent steed stands bold and proud,
To the shadows of the forest he is sadly bound.
A velvet coat covers his majestic hind,
He is the only one man has left behind.
Mother earth cradles her mythical progeny,
Embracing them safely in perfect harmony.
Mankind obliterating all that is sacred,
Catering for his own amusement and hatred.
Author notes
Dragon, Phoenix and Unicorn.
WORD BANK: Echo, Spread, Dance, Velvet, Cradle, Embrace.
A contest entry
- Creatures of Myth and Legend by Concrete Angel.
875 points, ended August 16, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Lovely
This is an amazing poem.I loved the way you did this.I love the rhyme of it and I could see the places in my mind as I read this.I think you did really well,you are very good. -
a captivating poem with not only mythical images, but environmental themes of today.
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thanks for reading and commenting i appeaciate it tremendously.
ang
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very nice...
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thank you
ang
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Great!
I can sense your amazement for these mythical creatures. Your writing is so good, so flourish-ful. It was great. I love it. I read it. Your rhyming is good. Adjectives and Verbs, okay. Wow fine. You have amazing sense in poetry.
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*faints* ok now that i have recovered from your amazing critique (sp) i can thank you from the bottom of my heart.
thank you
ang
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Writing o9f mythical creatures, to me is about exploring archetypes that express much about our view of the world and the things we ought to hold in greater esteem. Very nice poem. Thanks for sharing
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thank you for reading and commenting
ang
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Wow, your language is so amazing here, just so beautiful. Keep writing, you have talent
Thanks for sharing, have a great day!
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Wow, I love your language. I had to look up a couple words XD
This is so well written, and the tone just about gave me shivers
Thanks for sharing, have a good day!
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thank you so very very much for both comments
ang
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Oh I really like this. The rhyme of it gives it a very enchanting quality. Your imagery is great and the overall feeling this emits suits the contest well. Please be sure to write in your author notes the creatures you wrote about and the words you used from the word list to keep this great poem in the running for a trophy before judging... I saw them in the preview for the poem though... just noticed after I went back to the contest page... so I guess I'll let it slide lol
Thank you for taking the time to enter and good luck in my contest! -
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I originally had them in, i just put them in the wrong place
sometimes i can be really dilly! lol.
im glad you enjoyed this, it was interesting for me to write.
ang
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