A roller coaster ride if there ever was one,
the ebb and flow of it, not unlike the tide.
Better hold onto me tight, this will be fun.
Doesn't matter the weather, rainy or sun,
this macabre carnival, resides deep inside.
A roller coaster ride if there ever was one.
One minute happy, the next, coming undone,
totally out of control and starting to slide.
Better hold onto me tight, this will be fun.
A bi-polar nightmare of desperation,
where does it come from, where does it all hide?
A roller coaster ride if there ever was one.
Brainwashed over the years, a mental prison,
beaten down esteem, battered ego and pride.
Better hold onto me tight, this will be fun.
I'm here for the long haul, you can bet your guns,
I'll give you my all, not in front, but beside.
A roller coaster ride if there ever was one,
better hold onto me tight, this will be fun.
Author notes
This time we are going to use the Villanelle Form ONLY!
Prompt: Married to Emotions
Villanelle
A Villanelle is a nineteen-line poem consisting of
a very specific rhyming scheme: a1ba2, aba1, aba2, aba1, aba2, aba1a2.
The first and the third lines in the first stanza are repeated in
alternating order throughout the poem, and appear together
in the last couplet (last two lines).
I have found the trick to writing a decent Villanelle (in my opinion)
is first of all to write L1 and L3.
My preference is to try to keep all the lines about the same metrical length, give or take a syllable or two. It does help with the flow considerably.
You need 7 "A" rhymes and 6 "B" rhymes,
so you want to make sure your first A & B rhymes are easily rhymed,
the rest of the nineteen lines are refrain lines.
1/3rd of a Villanelle is your lines 1 & 3
Your refrain lines being what they are, should be used in a little different context in each of the stanzas, that is where it can get tricky. As well as tying it all together at the end in the last couplet. 
They are a challenge to write and write well, which I still haven't done to date.
In a list
A contest entry
- Poetry Formed XLX - by Bear by Arkbear.
850 points, ended September 3, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I can see who's been here, please leave a comment.
Comments
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Yes....there has been some confusion of the contemporary Villanelle....but you have done well with this one - Your Tone is nice....your rhymne is not forced.....your balance of Show & Tell is Spot on and over-all....and visual picture worth the ride......best of luck to you Grizz
Blessings,
Bear -
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And this WAS fun! This picture is perfect as well. I liked this villanelle very much..like a whirlwind.
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I liked this a lot, this is a form that seems to have differing opinons on how it is written. I guess that is because there are varying opinions on what is accepted as modern day villanelles and then there are the traditional ones which is what you have given instructions for. It is kinds like the Haiku in that regard. I'm so glad to see that you inserted the instructions because for those that have never written one and wish to learn it... they will most likely copy your instructions, bringing back the traditional form which is always a good thing.
I wish you the best of luck in the contest dear.
Hugs,
Suzi
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This was an awesome attempt love, some of the stanzas didn't seem to flow well then again lol (me saying that, now our Bear will say it's perfect,
reverse psychology baby! )
Great ride of emotions..Oh yea, you know I am in this one
Love you
Tory
Oh yea, Good luck!!
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