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lifes not fair

i wish someone understood, anyone really
this trapped feeling, knowing i'll never escape
watching my dreams being shoved off a cliff with every dollar she takes
college, freedom, my future. when that is taken what am i left with?
it's all i ever wanted, all i ever dreamed of and because of them it's being ripped from me
their irresponsibility hurt me not them, but since when is that new?
work my ass off to watch my money be spent of what they should be paying for
i wish i could turn my back on them, leave, just disappear but they're family
and my brother deserves so much more
so what do i do? do i leave and fight for my future
or watch it slip away so that he will have a chance
lifes not fair.

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i know the grammer/punctuation is horrible, its more just life all my thoughts flowing out

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  • DoubtsMartyr
    August 17

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    I disagree that it's easy. It's not easy at all. By the same token, you have to be strong. You have to fight for your life. You'll only get what you feel like you deserve in life, and not only that - you have to act on your thoughts and stop at nothing to get what it is that you want. There are a lot of brutal and nasty people out there, and the truth is, you're going to be tougher than they are to make it if you want something worth while out of life. I'm not going to criticize your poem, but I really want to see you go out there and start taking back what's yours.


    • nobodys-girl
      August 18
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      i actually have started im applying for college and im just going to let my mom fight her own battles for now on. i can't keep taking care of her and i realize that now.
      thank you


  • Done but Not Gone
    August 16

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    I have a situation similar to this, with 2 younger brothers... You find a solution, let me know.


  • ScarsFade
    August 11

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    Well that's easy follow your heart, i say fight for your future. If that's what you want go for it. Life will enver be fair in any respect but you can always make your own luck if you fight hard enough for it you can and will be unstoppable, great poem there is a lot of emotion and desperation here, well captured....keep penning....much <3...scars.