We play a game of solitaire
With every card we’re dealt
Placing one hurt on another
Until pride and anger felt
Each card builds frustration
Heaviness within our hearts
Looking for some small relief
Within that missing card
Never dealing with the issues
We move those cards across
Place them on another chance
Same issues causing loss
And so the deck keeps rising
Convincing us we will win
Then once again the game is lost
We lay down those cards again
Life is a game of solitaire
If we hold on to hurt and pain
Taking our deck into others lives
Un-dealt issues rising again
So next time you play solitaire
See your life before your eyes
Each card see as an issue played
Examine it and grow wise
©
30/3/04
Author notes
Written March 29th, 2004
A contest entry
- SOLITARY by rainwalker.
450 points, ended April 29, 2008, 7 entries
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Good rhyme and rhythm, smooth flow pulling the reader through the piece. I like the metaphor of life as a card game. Thank you for entering and good luck!
-Laura -
Then God comes along and stacks the deck for us! What a joker He can be sometime.
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wow great analogy!! I loved how you described it as solitare so original! the only thing was I wish you wouldn't have added the last two lines I would have liked it better but I still loved it!! my favorite line was
And so the deck keeps rising
Convincing us we will win
Then once again the game is lost
We lay down those cards again
that would have been a good ending but it was still great! good job!
~Lily -
Totally Rockin'
I really like this poem! I love your comparrason of life to game of cards! This isn't really a poem that a has a lot of strong imagery. But never the lesss, it is more of a story poem.
There was one comment on your last stanza:
So next time you play solitaire
See your life before your eyes
Each card see as an issue played
Examine it and grow wise
I think you meant:
Each card seen as an issue played
Good job! -
i really like this poem and it metaphor is very unique! and i agree with ^ RobertRichard... it does make me wonder about the dealer but if u really think about it when playing solitare dont u deal the cards ur self? oooo.... and down the rabbit hole we go
i could interexamine this to death or i could just say good job.... GREAT JOB! lol keep it up! i applaud!
~av
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An Ace!
I liked this made me wonder about the dealer.
Nice write, dealt with a full deck of fine
poetic expression.
Enjoyed!
RR -
I like your use of metaphor, comparing life to a game of solitaire. Your rhyming is really brilliant!!!!!!! Keep up the good work.
Tom xxx -
this has got excellent metaphor, i love the rhyming scheme, and the game of solitaire ios the game that i play when i am bored in school!!!! my favourite bit is "Never dealing with the issues
We move those cards across
Place them on another chance
Same issues causing loss
And so the deck keeps rising
Convincing us we will win
Then once again the game is lost
We lay down those cards again
Life is a game of solitaire
If we hold on to hurt and pain
Taking our deck into others lives
Un-dealt issues rising again
So next time you play solitaire
See your life before your eyes
Each card see as an issue played
Examine it and grow wise" keep up the good work
i think that i will be reading more of your work!!!
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I really like the metaphore used in this poem - it's very effective, epecially the thoughtful last stanza.
Good write, well done -
wow, this was so awesome how you compared solitaire and life. Awesomely done! You should enter in my contest called "stuff". Anyway, keep up the good writing and take it easy. :-)
<3,
Alison -
Wow!
Wow, I never thought about relaying such a powerful and true message into an analogy of a solitaire game, excellent idea! I play this game all the time and now I'll never think of it in to same light! Great write! Powerful message.
*Hugs*
Little Spirit -
Excellent write!! I really like this poem and its message.
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Wow.. I have a poem by the same title... But I like yours better.. The meaning is clear
Blessed Be
Lilli -
Excellent metaphor! There's a contest up for metaphors right now, you should consider entering this in it. It's very unique. I never win at solitaire. There's also a song called Solitaire, one of my favourites. It reminded me of this poem. Good flow, subtle moral, not preachy. Thanks for an excellent write.
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Wow, i really really like it. It is so true. people may say that life is solitare but i never understood before. Thankx!
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I can't believe I am the first to comment on this. You have an excellent lesson to be learned from this one. It gives me strenghth and encouragement. I just love how you compared life to a game of solitaire. Excellent write. I loved it.
becca
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