You say demons are weak
We say you are ignorant
And your mind is ours
You say demons don't exist
We say you are blind
And your soul is ours
You say demons are deceivers
We say you are unworthy
And your body is ours
If demons were weak
It wouldn't be so easy
To enter you're souls
If demons didn't exist
It wouldn't be so easy
For you to do our bidding
And If us demons are deceivers
Then mortal man is no better
Then god
What did you think
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The demons I fear the most are the ones that live among us, whose hearts are black and live off the suffering of others. Greedy Lawyers, politicians, bad cops, wife beaters, child abusers, etc...I fear them far more than I do any denizens from a hypothetical Netherworld (and I dare say their hearts are far filled with far more evil.)
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darkly wonderful
again you paint such a dark picture...And If us demons are deceivers
Then mortal man is no better
Then god
i truly love the way you write... more more
PKO
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I like it!
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thanks
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*puts foil hat on* he he. Im a christian, i do not class myself as religious, but you know iv'e studied many religions. I think the term religion means a set of guidelines created by man to control someones belief. Though anyone who believes in God and doesnt believe in demons is an idiot. How can you believe in a God but not satan and his followers ie; demons. Sadly there are so many right-wing fools who are that way *sigh*.
I can't say i completely agree with this but i like it very much. Once again, it is a thinker, lol, and once again. Too many people can't think for themselves, or are too scared too.
Great write!!
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Holy Shit..There is a messege here I am sure of it
Awesome work here, Bell. Such power in this piece. You really braught it home with this one. Demons are all around us, if we want to accept it or not. This poem has such and "In your face" feel to it and that is what I love so much.
well done,
-Dusty-
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yes there are messages in this piece, well spotted, think your the only one that did spot it actaully lol. glad you liked it dustin
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I like the darkness in this write!
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I'm glad, thanks
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yum!
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erm glad you thought it was yum lol that word again
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The poem seems a little stiff. I think the concept is awesome ti has good intenion but the whole thing kinda reads liek a cave man grunt, "if us demons." No one really talks like that, even if they are supposedly evil. I think you just need to put more reality into it because what's real is we create demons here on earth, so make it believable...these are jsut suggestions so don't take it to heart, i think there was a really good idea put behind this poem....keep penning...much <3..scars.
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Its actually a demon who is talking that way telling it like they see it, its not meant to be a from a real persons point of view. I think it has enough reality but that's just me you see it differently obviously. Thank you for telling me what you thought of the poem though. it wont be to everyone's liking because we all have different taste.
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never said i didn't like it...just saying it read stiff.
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i didnt actually say that u didnt like it i just stated it wont be to 'everyones' liking at the way its written
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okey dokey.
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Impressive
I lov the strong point of the poem& I love the overall feel and allire to the poem too. your write makes so much sense and I love the dark edge you bring to this write. anyw ays just a magnifivrnt well penned write and I completley agree withcha and yes demons to exist because whether we like it or not we all have demons inside of us and they only grow stronger in due time and make us act differently than we normally would be and do things we couldn't even foresee. any ways strong powerful write and keep up the great work
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This poem came to me last night, of course this poem has secret meaning's in them.Its to make ppl stop and think and regard it more then just a poem. Glad you liked it bro
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