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now you know why I write about flowers

 

 

 


I wanted to tell you, that
for a poem to be sho yu

it should simply be
garden

where words are
part leaf, part flower
and the sound that fills
the blank lines
is just the wind’s voice
drawn through your limbs
like a song,
  a slow purr
born in the chlorophyll
of thought,
is just
the poem opening
in the double smile of a peony
because its fragrance
could no longer
remain within

that is,
if you take my face
in your hands
there is no need for botanics
or metaphor

for there aren't any words of joy
that cannot be read

on the single petal


of my face

 

 

 

 

 

 











 

Author notes

partly inspired by a poem by Skyros Bruce

 

the Chinese word for a peony is “sho yu”, meaning “most beautiful
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  • Shibboleth
    November 23
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    This is simply stunning. You are a fantastic writer.


  • Harrisham Minhas
    September 22

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    Well-expressed with metaphors and feelings.
    Congrats on the Gold.




  • chilali
    September 21

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    congratulations on the gold! wow.


  • glenn shannon silver member
    August 29
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    stunning and beautiful just like a flower


  • thepoetssoul
    August 23

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    True brilliance, what beautiful words so full of love and grace.
    I love the usage of chlorophyll of thought,
    rolls off the tongue magically.
    Thank you for sharing your poetic heart

    Tony

  • Topnotchsy
    August 21

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    Beautiful piece with a wonderful feel!! Congrats on a well deserved gold!!


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    August 20

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    Beautiful!!

    Congratulations on the Golden Chalice!!
    Peace & Hugs,
    xx Cyn xx

  • skyros
    August 20

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    Thank-you for honouring me by using my poem (written at age 17) for inspiration! I especially loved these lines:
    "is just
    the poem opening
    in the double smile of a peony"
    and these:
    "for there aren't any words of joy
    that cannot be read

    on the single petal

    of my face



  • Dalaney gold member
    August 18

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    I've read this poem every single day. It is absolutely lovely and makes me feel so calm inside. You are a beautiful beautiful writer.


  • heron
    August 18
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    Exceptional

    I read it twice and I find it good for meditating.

  • Virgoan
    August 17

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    Another food for the soul my friend.

    I like the breathing of this poem of yours.

  • strut711
    August 16
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    moving

    great, fascinating


  • LadyElbereth
    August 16

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    Simply Lovely

    Congratulation Nicolette on the gold, this wonderfully penned piece has such brilliance I am thinking your trophy must envy your beautiful words…where you blossom as the bloom of the day…my heartfelt thank you for this most lovely piece.


    Lady E


    • Nicolette gold member
      August 17
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      Catherine, thank you so much for your generous and kind comments


  • Kathrin silver member
    August 16

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    ditto

    I too wish I understood free verse rather than liked as one cannot dislike what one does not understand, this beautiful fresh poetry has made me increase my knowledge get off my ass and learn, thank you


  • DesolatELifE
    August 16

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    I wish I liked free verse, because that sounded lovely.

  • ThEcHoSeNoNe
    August 14

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    thought provoking

    Great write. This made my mind wander. I also disagree with bluemonday, poetry does not always have to ryhm or flow, but to do exactly what your poem did to me, to make you think, ponder about the meaning and hidden gestures within your words. If it does that, you have succeded. Well done.


  • Bluemonday silver member
    August 14

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    i thought it lack flow and design. I liked the concept but it lacked rythm


  • Peteskid gold member
    August 14

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    The Peony to me is like a delicate bowl of golden candy, warmly colored and eye-catching, a thing to hold in the mind's eye all day... like this poem, in that way, something beautiful to remember...PK


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    August 14

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    Absolutely gorgeous. Congratulations on the gold. Simply delightlful to read and enjoy. ~Pamela


  • Black Narcissus gold member
    August 14

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    As has been commented many times. Beautiful, simply beautiful.

    Well worthy of the shiny


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    August 13

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    absolutely stunnign writing..............................


  • Sonja
    August 13

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    Masterpiece...

    I read it and read it... and can't comment its beauty. It looks like you "squeezed" out the essence of poetry... the ending is so charming and tender and...
    ~Sonja~


  • SabaSophiya
    August 13

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    This is a wonderful creation, dear poet. The depth of your imagination is stunning. May your words always bloom with life. Way to go....

    Best,
    Sophie

  • Pied Piper
    August 13

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    Wonderfully executed, although there was one place where I stumbled reading: the second "is just" was a bit much. There were too many clauses in between so to make sense I had to intentionally go back to see what it related to. I don't give praise lightly. You should be proud, or as proud as you can be for getting praise from an anonymous guy you've never met.


  • Mari Goes gold member
    August 12

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    And so it's your poem, most beautiful!
    I always leave your pages with a smile and the mind filled with lovely thoughts. Thank you


  • BlackHawk
    August 12

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    Sweet & Simple ..... almost fell in love with this .......


  • Catie Sheeran gold member
    August 11

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    absolutely stunning.




  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    August 11

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    So intricate and beautiful, just like a peony.

    Loved this Nicky.


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    August 11

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    And this is truly beautiful
    Crafted together with the blends of nature and the beauty of a person.
    A delightful read
    Best wishes to you
    Julie


  • Thomas Scott gold member
    August 11

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    Yes! This is why we have poetry!

    "... that is, if you take my face in your hands ... "
    What a splendid resolution to "I wanted to tell you ... ".
    I'll be reading and re-reading this for a long time.
    So many great lines, bulbs of little similies within the metaphor.
    This really excites me.
    Thanks for it, Nicolette.
    And good luck in that contest.

    Tom

  • love the ending! great poem


  • marc creamore
    August 10

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    Nicolette . . . Thank god you are always around to soothe my own sometimes blistering vernacular . . . Whenever I feel in need of some spiritual comfort, some quietude from the savage ravings inside my head, I pick up your book and carry it with me and open it beneath an ancient oak tree and breathe in your delicate and ethereal words . . . ah . . .

    Marc


  • AJ Morelli gold member
    August 10
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    really beautiful Nic



    al


  • quietly burning
    August 10
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    nicely done !

  • abu nuwas
    August 10

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    Nicolette

    I'm not big on mushy stuff-- but this delicate thread from floral to real is quite lovely, even for us Philistines!

  • You have such a gift for soft-spoken poetry. Truly an original voice that speaks soft, yet leaves you remembering what was said.


  • arafura gold member
    August 10

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    Beautiful. I'm lost in the garden of your words...


  • Mallig gold member
    August 10
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    wonderful


  • Grunts Girl silver member
    August 10

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    and if i had a stamen it would be proudly verticle
    (hee hee - of course i had to)
    I loved the gentleness of this all- and there is a quality of guidence and teaching within this that is all loving


  • Night Hope gold member
    August 10

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    This single line is such a beautiful, tender poem in and of itself, my Friend: "the wind’s voice/drawn through your limbs/like a song". Que magnifique! Good luck in Carol's contest, Sweetie.



  • grm
    August 10

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    you are the genuine article, my dear.

    your love and gentleness are unmatched, as is your poetry.

    i am surprised and impressed to see you did the one about poenies. lol

    yes, it is...my mooi vrou



  • pocket pixie gold member
    August 10
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    oh and
    komo wayo (not sure the grammar there, but it is korean)

  • pocket pixie gold member
    August 10

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    beautiful garden, nic


  • tara wilson gold member
    August 10

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    this is sooo beautiful Nic, something about the rhythm of this poem is very reminiscent of 'Thirty-Seven' by Skyros Bruce, she's Canadian....i'll send the poem to you....

    beautiful words, this is a gorgeous garden...


  • charcoal
    August 10

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    you make me fall in love with love and poetry.

    beautiful, soft and so very inspiring.


  • Mariana gold member
    August 10

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    Nicolette, you write about flowers because you are one of Africa's most beautiful flowers. The essence of love that flows from the stem of your heart to the petal that is your face adds to it's beauty twofold, much like a peony. The end result is as magnificent as this poem. Simply gorgeous!

    Mariana  

  • Rowan gold member
    August 10

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    "where words are
    part leaf, part flower
    and the sound that fills
    the blank lines
    is just the wind’s voice
    drawn through your limbs"

    Now that is poetry. So very beautiful Nic. Loved every line.


  • Allyce May gold member
    August 10

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    I really am a sucker for flowers too - they have some really beautiful ones here in the Caribbean that I had not seen before. You always do them justice too The beauty of your poetry is equal to that of any flower in full bloom

    Love the use of "chlorophyll"! Who would have thought science could be said this lovely! Given the "garden/plant/leaf/petal" theme of this poem, I also find it so very fitting, given that it is, in part, the essence of a plant; and too, the essence of this love

    Reading your poetry always makes me feel hopeful and appreciative that I have been lucky enough to read it and share it with you!




  • Namita
    August 10

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    So 'Neruda', this one! Your works have the quality and beauty of great romantic poets like Neruda or Cummings, and yet you have this wonderful sense of individuality in your poems. This is such a 'flowery' poem.

    "sound that fills the blank line is just the wind's voice" - how truly and beautifully written!

    You have a marvellous gift to understand the universe through 'verse' (that poem is one of my faves of yours) and a style that is so individualistic, no one can ever take it away from you; you beautiful beautiful woman.

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    August 10

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    Everything that the dear Poetess plants with her pen buds, blooms and flowers. Marvellous metaphor sown and grown from green fingers, the reader has the " double smile of a peony" upon gardening here, one is on the face and the other, the other is in the heart. "Sho yu" meaning most beautiful describes the gentle grace of the Poetess and her pure poetry along with being the Chinese word for peony. Phonetically " Sho yu" is what "now you know why I write about flowers does organically.



    Kudos.


  • leander Moderators member
    August 10
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    It absolutely is...


  • Matt E. Smith gold member
    August 10

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    I feel priviledged to read you as I honestly believe you are far beyond allpoetry... your writing is beautiful. For me to love a flowery 'garden' poem says a lot...and I love it.

    you are one of the few people here who I actually get excited about seeing a new poem posted from.


  • Cannonsfire
    August 10

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    You know I am happy to be the bud to your beauty of flowers and petals. Sigh..this is gorgeous C

  • piggyback
    August 10

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    aww. Your poems are indeed flowers, Nicolette - and they're the type that never wilt. Maybe that's why I love them so much. You're good with the photosynthesis part, so to speak - reading this made me realize, there is so much light and warmth in all your poems, even the sadder ones! I wish I could spread light through my poetry like you do.


  • perfectsunset gold member
    August 10

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    Wow; this was absolutely breath-taking.
    You've personified the peony with
    such beauty and grace, and deep
    metaphors. I love this piece.

    Gold-worthy most definitely


  • Emmyb gold member
    August 10
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    i know this...... i see it every time you write and envy it

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