Salty ice and cigarette
Drinking whisky
Bitter memories and pain
I know I'm 89 already
You may write a poem
To celebrate my birthday
But it wont be as good
As if it was written by me
Because you are not the
- - - Charles Bukowski
Author notes
For Charles Bukowski
For his 89th Birthday 16/8/2009
I aprreciate if you make a comment/applause
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I have heard of his name..I will have to read his work..It would seem he knows he is good...so likely he is...Curious now!
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fabulously egocentric. hope I am half that good at 89.
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Nice, quirky tribute to the late and great Charles Bukowski.
A job well done!
I'm sure he'd feel honored if he had, had the opportunity to read this.
Safely hidden in the darkness,
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nice this is nice and well thought out and written good job on the poem. I love it nice on
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Nice tribute Rehan, his work is amazing I agree, Josie
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I have read several pieces of his work, and Charles Bukowski we are not.
Nicely penned poet for a 69th Birthday.
Rosa
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Very nice job here. Isn't it fun to write about the ones we admire? I do think this is a great tribute to a worthy writer. Keep penning, you improve every day.
Mama
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Wow, I'm sure he really appreciated it!
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this is penned well for the gift you have said
no one can write and fill the pages of his life
for he has filled them well Hugs Angel♥
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mmmmmmm ,,,,, well not much excited.. but it's okkkkkkk)))...
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I like how you used snippetts from the picture as like words in the poem. If you know what I mean. I did like this poem, it was you know different from most of other poems. I hope this person has a good sixty ninth birthday.
I hope he celebrates it happy and well. A nice simple poem. Keep it up.
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Humz.. Good Work
you have used the nip of your pen in an old Italic Style
very well done
by
the poet of hearts and beautiful words
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Wow I like his work - but is he still alive?
I had no idea!
I like the salty ice and cigarette image (though you misspelled cigarette) - it's suggestive and lets the reader make their own story from it. I like the first stanza most because it's more descriptive but not preachy. The second stanza is simple and appreciative, but it confuses me. Are you writing a dedication to him from his point of view? Also, considering who it's for, personally I'd prefer "because" rather than "cause", to sound more elegant. Sweet of you to write this.
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Very nice :]
I quite liked this dedication to him. I hope I'm as lively as him when I get to 69
Great write, keep it up.
Claire x -
This is really simple but kind of mysterious at the same time
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Indeed i am not...fabulous poem, you have a lot of spirit and i wish to have your enthusiasm and drink some whiskey when i am a suave 69 year old....wonderful poem..much <3....scars.
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Let Charles Bukowski be himself, his pain is not new. a bit of wisdom in your poem. most older people carry pain of some sort and do it in their own way.
By the way, the picture speaks volumes.
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