I'll not find you out
like the list of a scavenger hunt
or a favorite coat in the back of the closet
that you never thought you'd see again.
Yet you found it.
And you were happy.
As for me, I was naked-
defenseless against any of your harm.
Just as it was when you said you had to go home
and went to a place far away from me.
I realized my heart was not where you belonged.
Yet I survived, slowly.
And I am walking on two feet.
I'll not find you out
or perhaps I simply will not try.
I am the photograph rediscovered years from now,
but even then I will not return.
I will keep walking a fine line
between memory and regret,
though I know now my nakedness
was never your intent.
For I will be a memory
wherever you call home.
What does this mean to you?
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The last strophe is very nicely tucked in. I especially like
I am the photograph rediscovered years from now
I almost want it to read
I am the photograph rediscovered years from now
for I will be a memory
wherever you call home.When I first read this bit I read harm as arm and it made perfect sense--after re-reading it I liked arms better.
defenseless against any of your harms.
defenseless against any of your arms.
Nice piece,
Josh
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I loved it. You don't need no criticism. You don't need to revise it. Its perfect the way it is. Your wonderful at writing poetry. Two thumbs on that one. Keep going on your awesome poetry. Great job chicka.
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I realized my heart was not where you belonged. Yet I survived, slowly. And I am walking on two feet. This is really good I like the way you make your word entagle and intertwine. Thank you for sharing I really enjoyed this write.
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one of the best i read 2day
''I will keep walking a fine line between between memory and regret,though i know now my nakedness was never intent.''great work
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I really enjoyed this poem, my fav lines were
"I'll not find you out
or perhaps I simply will not try.
I am the photograph rediscovered years from now,
but even then I will not return.
I will keep walking a fine line
between memory and regret,"
So powerful and well written
Thanks for sharing, keep writing!
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