I know you,
I see you,
I feel you within.
We are together,
In pleasure,
In sin.
No simple feeling,
This pleasure,
This pain.
Yet I do understand,
To give,
Is to gain.
So, I give,
All that I am,
The whole of my life,
And all of my heart.
Accept it and hold it,
For, I have nothing left,
My time is nigh,
And so I depart.
Depart with it all,
For much have I given.
No need for return,
For now I am riven.
But this ain't the end,
It's just a beginning,
The end of the losing,
From here I start winning.
Author notes
- “How’s It going to be” by Third Eye Blind
http://www.elyrics.net/read/t/third-eye-blind-lyrics/how_s-it-going-to-be-lyrics.html
A contest entry
- Lyric, Quote, Text Prompts by Not-The-Sun.
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I really liked this part "This pleasure,
This pain.
Yet I do understand,
To give,
Is to gain." I also really enjoyed seeing where you took this prompt, there is a lot to this song; I hope you find a title for it
I sort of wish you didn't put commas at the end of every line and then the last line of each stanza has a period; i think the punctuation should be a bit different, a couple more periods and a lot less commas.
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wow
this is awesome lady! just truly wonderful to read, and thought sentiment is so lovely..good work my friend, your pen is indeed powerful..
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